Terry
I am glad to join italki. Hello everyone , glad to join italki. I am studying MBA in Taiwan. Before joining the program , I previously worked in retail as a data analysis manager. I am looking forward to improving my English skill. It's my pleasure to make friends with you. P.S. I got almost full mark in university admissions chinese-writing exam. Hope my mandarin skill can help you a lot.
Jul 2, 2015 6:06 PM
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As an alternative to Jeff's correction...

 

I am glad [I] join[ed] italki.

Hello everyone[,] glad to [be here on] italki.
I am [currently an MBA student] in Taiwan. [use "an" because MBA is spoken with an "em" sound for "M"]
Before [starting] the program, I previously worked in retail as a data analysis manager.
I [] look[] forward to improving my English [proficiency].
It's my pleasure to make friends with you.

P.S. I [earned] almost full mark[s] [on] [the] university admission['s] chinese-writing exam.
Hope my [M]andarin skill[s] can [be of] help.

July 2, 2015
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I am glad to join italki.


Hello everyone, , I am glad to join italki. I am studying MBA student in Taiwan. [Not wrong but this is better] Before joining enrolling in the program , I previously worked in retail as a data analysis manager.
I am  太多 "I am" 了, 覺得很倦壓 Looking  forward to improve my English skills. It's my pleasure 先前語氣写的隨爽, 突然間語氣變成這么正式, 有自高感 Great to make friends with you.

P.S. I got almost full marks in my university admissions chinese-writing exam. Hope my Mandarin skills can be of help you a lot語法沒用錯, 不過語氣是说讀者的中文太差了, 有藐視之意. 更改的寫法有誠意.

July 2, 2015
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