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formal report TED In the report, Gayle told us that every group female friends has the funny one, the one that we need to go to cry, the one that we need to tell secrets or a hard day. First, she spoke about a group who was a community of groundbreaking women who came together, first to become teammates, then friends and in conclusion a family. She reported that this story begins with special operation's leaders who said that we need women to help us to finish this war. Thus, female soldiers became part of history and joined special operations on the bad field such as Afghanistan. For them it was not about politics, but it was about serving the purpose.
Jul 3, 2015 10:46 PM
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formal report TED

In the talk, Gayle tells us that every group of female friends has the funny one, the one we go to to cry, the one with whom we share our secrets. First she speaks about a community of groundbreaking women who came together, first to become teammates, then friends and finally a family. [Are there two stories about two groups of women, or is it the same story you're describing in both these sentences?] Her story begins with special operations leaders who said that we need women to help us to finish this war. Thus, female soldiers became part of history and joined special operations on the battlefield as they are today in Afghanistan. For them it was not about politics, but it was about serving the greater good.

 

[The English is good, but it's hard to understand what you're talking about in this. Is this a summary of a TED talk? Is Gayle her first or last name? You should always use the last name in this kind of writing. Give some more context, and we'll have a better idea of what kind of corrections to make. If it is a TED talk or a text, you'd use the pressent tense to summarize.]

July 4, 2015
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