This is my first article. Hi all. My name is Sefa. I'm from Turkey. I'm 27 years old. I have finished college. My first college section is Marble Technician,other sections name are Foreign Trade and B

Sefa

This is my first article. Hi all. My name is Sefa. I'm from Turkey. I'm 27 years old. I have finished college. My first college section is Marble Technician,other sections name are Foreign Trade and Business Administration. I'm working in a Foreign Trade Company,my job is Export Manager,but I'm a new. I want to improve English and in this way I want to found new friends and new customer. We are producing Naturel Stone and we are manufacturer and exporter. But my English not yet. I'm waiting your helps. Thank you all. Regards. Sefa.

Jul 7, 2015 6:10 AM

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Hi all, my name is Sefa. I'm from Turkey, and I'm 27 years old. I have finished college. My first college section is Marble Technician. My other sections are Foreign Trade and Business Administration. I'm working in a Foreign Trade Company where I work as an Export Manager, but I'm a new. I want to improve my English so I can make new friends and find new customers. We are producing Natural Stone and we manufacture and export. My English is not there yet, so I'm asking for your help. Thank you.
Regards,
Sefa

First, I would combine some of the sentences by using conjunctions. Also, I'm not sure if you mean degree or major for the word section, so I didn't do too much with that sentence. Also, remember to put spaces between commas and words. Also, watch when you are using past and present tense.

July 7, 2015

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