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Write about the disadvantages of internet Could you help me to correct this essay please? Thank you. Nowadays, the internet is one of the most powerful tools in the world because of its benefits. Besides the massive benefits the internet has brought to our life, the internet also has many disadvantages. A research has shown that the blue light emitted by devices such as smart phones, tablets and laptops can make people unable to go to sleep in a reasonable time. In addition, there are a lot of amusing services on the internet and it's easy to make you waste much time. Also, children can be negative and more violent because of the internet games that contain violence and negative information. Another disadvantage of using internet is that it has made people lazier because we can be easy to search information or buy or sell something we want by clicking. Moreover, the internet can bring viruses to computers and the viruses may destroy or leak personal information of users. In conclusion, everything has both advantages and drawbacks, so we need to use the internet wisely to enjoy its benefits.
Jul 7, 2015 3:25 PM
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Write about the disadvantages of internet

Could you help me to correct this essay please? Thank you.

Nowadays, the internet is one of the most powerful tools in the world because of its benefits. Besides the massive benefits that the internet has brought to our life, the internet also has many disadvantages.
A research has shown that the blue light emitted by devices such as smart phones, tablets and laptops can make people unable to go to sleep in a reasonable time. prevent people from sleeping.
In addition, there are a lot of amusing services on the internet and it's easy to make you waste much a lot of time. Also, research shows that it influences children to be negative and more violent due to the internet games that contain violence and negative information.
Another disadvantage of using the internet is that it has made people lazier; because we can be easy easily search for information or buy or sell something we want just by clicking.
Moreover, the internet can bring viruses to computers and the viruses may destroy or leak personal information of users.
In conclusion, everything has both advantages and drawbacks, so we need to use the internet wisely to enjoy its benefits.

 

Well done, you write really well in English!

July 7, 2015
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