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我的家乡 我的家乡 我向大家介绍我的家乡。它叫Newcastle(不是英国的城市)。 它位于爱尔兰北部。大约一万居民。人们从事农业,商店,或者服务业。自然和环境很优美。依山傍水。山不太高。虽然天气不太好但是夏天不太热(20度)冬天不太冷(2度)。百年以前有旅行业。不过当现人们假期的时候去欧洲南边。现在还有大酒店。镇里没有高中。我们在公共汽车在邻近的镇去了学校。 My hometown. I would like to give everyone an introduction to my hometown. It is called Newcastle (not the English city). It is situated in the north of Ireland. The population is about 10,000 people. The people work in farming, shops or service industries. The environment and nature are very beautiful. There are mountains on one side and the sea on the other. The mountains aren’t too high. Although the weather isn’t very good the summer isn’t too hot (20º) and the winter isn’t too cold (2º). A hundred years ago there was a tourist industry. However nowadays when people have holidays they go to the south of Europe. There is still a large hotel. There isn’t a secondary school. We went to a secondary school by bus in another town. Note - this a practice of language studied in class. So the structure isn't mine. It is mostly adapted from the example.
Jul 12, 2015 5:58 AM
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我的家乡

我的家乡
向大家介绍一下我的家乡。它叫Newcastle(不是英国的城市)。 它位于爱尔兰北部,大约有一万左右人口。人们从事农业、商业或者服务业。(You should use 、in Chinese for listing. There should be no mark between the last two things.)环境(This word in Chinese seems more general than "environment". So we don't need to say '自然和环境'.)优美依山傍水山也不高。(If a sentence is too short, we will not use a period.)虽然天气不太好但是夏天不太热,大概20摄氏度,冬天也不太冷,大概2摄氏度(We seldom use parentheses in a sentence.)。百年以前,这里曾经有过(It a past tense here, so we would say "曾经", "过")旅行业。不过,现在人们假期的时候去欧洲南边。现在这里还有大酒店。但镇里没有高中我们乘公共汽车去邻近的镇上学

My hometown.
I would like to give everyone an introduction to my hometown. It is called Newcastle (not the English city). It is situated in the north of Ireland. The population is about 10,000 people. The people work in farming, shops or service industries. The environment and nature are very beautiful. There are mountains on one side and the sea on the other.(Perfect translation here! I will learn this beautifu translation from you.) The mountains aren’t too high. Although the weather isn’t very good the summer isn’t too hot (20º) and the winter isn’t too cold (2º). A hundred years ago there was a tourist industry. However nowadays when people have holidays they go to the south of Europe. There is still a large hotel. There isn’t a secondary school. We went to a secondary school by bus in another town.

Note - this a practice of language studied in class. So the structure isn't mine. It is mostly adapted from the example.

July 31, 2015
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我的家乡

我向大家介绍(一下)我的家乡。它叫Newcastle(不是英国的城市)。 它位于爱尔兰北部。(有)大约一万居民。人们主要经营商店,从事农业,商店,或者服务业。这里自然环境很优美依山傍水。山不太高。虽然气不太好但是夏天不太热(20度)冬天不太冷(2度)。百年以前这里旅游业很发达旅行业。不过当现 现在人们假期的时候去欧洲南边。这里现在还有大酒店。镇里没有高中。我们在公共汽车在邻近的镇去了学校我们的孩子会坐公交汽车去临近镇子的学校上学。

July 15, 2015
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我的家乡

我的家乡
我向大家介绍我的家乡。Directly means: I introduce my hometown to you. If you want to express"I would like to", it is better to be: 我想向大家介绍(一下)我的家乡. 我向大家介绍一下我的家乡 sounds better than 我向大家介绍我的家乡, as the latter one is too direct.

 

它叫Newcastle(不是英国的城市)。 它位于爱尔兰北部大约(有)一万居民。The sentences can be connected to one, as they both introduce the overall picture of Newcastle.

人们从事农业商店或者服务业。The slight-pause mark (顿号)"、" is needed when introducing short and parallel phrases, instead of a comma ",". But nowadays, people won't say you are wrong to use comma between short phrases, but just the slight-pause mark is more correct. Please notice that you should use a comma, instead of a slight-pause mark, between relatively long and parallel phrases. Eg. 我擦了窗户,扫了地,还倒了垃圾。

 

自然环境很优美。依山傍水。山不太高。To make it more consistant, you can try:纽卡斯尔有一座不太高的山,且依山傍水,自然环境优美。/纽卡斯尔自然环境(很)优美,依山傍水,但那里的山不太高。

虽然天气不太好,(Comma!)但是夏天不太热(20度)冬天不太冷(2度)。百年以前有旅行业。

不过当现人们假期的时候去欧洲南边。不过现在,人们假期的时候去欧洲南边/假期的时候人们去欧洲南边。

现在还有大酒店。镇里没有高中。我们在公共汽车在邻近的镇去了学校我们坐公共汽车去了邻镇/邻近的镇的学校、If you mean the secondary school you went to by bus is in another town, it should be "邻镇/邻近的镇的学校", instead of "在邻近的镇去了学校".

 

Very good one, grammar is good and it gives a clear picture of Newcastle. Though you said the structure wasn't yours, it is good to learn from it.


My hometown.
I would like to give everyone an introduction to my hometown. It is called Newcastle (not the English city). It is situated in the north of Ireland. The population is about 10,000 people. The people work in farming, shops or service industries. The environment and nature are very beautiful. There are mountains on one side and the sea on the other. The mountains aren’t too high. Although the weather isn’t very good the summer isn’t too hot (20º) and the winter isn’t too cold (2º). A hundred years ago there was a tourist industry. However nowadays when people have holidays they go to the south of Europe. There is still a large hotel. There isn’t a secondary school. We went to a secondary school by bus in another town.

Note - this a practice of language studied in class. So the structure isn't mine. It is mostly adapted from the example.

July 30, 2015

我的家乡 

我向大家介绍我的家乡。它叫纽卡斯尔(不是英国的城市)。 它位于爱尔兰北部。大约一万居民。人们从事农业,商业,或者服务业。自然环境很优美。依山傍水。山不太高。虽然天气不太好但是夏天不太热(20度)冬天不太冷(2度)。百年以前有旅行业。不过如今人们去欧洲南边度假。现在还有大酒店。这里没有高中。我们在邻近的镇坐公共汽车去学校。

July 15, 2015

我的家乡

我的家乡
我向大家介绍(一下)我的家乡。它叫西纽卡斯尔(镇)(不是英国的那个城市)。 它位于爱尔兰北部。大约(有)一万居民(人口大约有1万)。人们从事农业,商店,、零售商业或者服务业。(这里)自然环境(很)优美依山傍水山不太高。虽然天气不太好但是夏天不太热(20度)冬天不太冷(2度)。(一)百年以前有这里旅行业发达。不过当现现在人们假期的时候去欧洲南边(I would say '不过现在人们主要去欧洲南部度假')。这里现在还有大酒店。镇里没有高中我们<em>(这里的孩子)</em>公共汽车邻近的镇的学校去了学校上学(‘乘/坐公共汽车去临近的镇子上学’ is also okay.)



Note - this a practice of language studied in class. So the structure isn't mine. It is mostly adapted from the example.

July 31, 2015
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