Hunter Lee
Wonderful trip to west coast We finally come back to Tampa today after 21days travel in west coast . We've been magnificent Grand Cayon, beautiful Great Titon and amazing Yellow Stone, of course Yosemite too. I was shocked by the amazement of the natures, which are created by God, our only and true God. Thanks for you created everything, ourself included.
Jul 29, 2015 1:43 AM
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Wonderful Trip to/in/through the American West

We finally returned/came back to Tampa today after 21 days of travel in/through the western states of America. We've saw the magnificent Grand Canyon, beautiful Grand Teton, and the amazing Yellowstone. Yosemite too, of course. I was awed and amazed by nature, which was created by God, our only and true God. Thanks for creating everything, ourselves included.

 

Some of the places you mentioned are not on or near the "coast".  That's why I think it's better to refer to "the American West" or the "western states".

 

"Shocked" is somewhat negative, so I substituted "awed," which is positive.  

 

I enjoyed reading your post, and am so glad that you were able to see some of America's treasures.

July 29, 2015
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