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两道彩虹 今天晚上我去附近的森林散步了。在那里,当我坐着又想着,享受一点自我时间时,我看到l了很多了不起的东西。首先,我在天空里看到了两只龙互相追逐!我从小时候起,就再也没找过在天空里的云画,真是好玩儿!然后,回家路上我在一家小酒吧停下来喝一杯啤酒。突然下起了雨,不是一场大雨,只是一场清凉的阵雨。回家路上我在天空看到了一道美丽的彩虹。我拍了一些照片,但是,当我往前走时,从不同的角度看见那道彩虹时,看到了我从没见过的东西;两道彩虹,可以说是一道双彩虹!这真是美极了!最高的彩虹一部分被云遮掩着,它还没有下面彩虹的鲜艳或者明亮度,不过看见两道彩虹在一起,真是让我惊诧不已。我们的世界太漂亮了! (I found this incredibly hard to translate into Chinese, so I am including the English as well). I went for a walk this evening in the local woods and saw the most amazing things whilst just sitting, thinking and enjoying some me time. First of all, I saw dragons chasing each other in the sky! Not looked for pictures in the sky since I was a child, it was great fun, Then, on the way home I stopped for a pint in the local pub when it started to rain slightly. The rain wasn't heavy, just a nice summer drizzle, and on the way home I spotted a gorgeous rainbow in the sky. I snapped a photo or two, but then as I walked on and looked from another angle, I saw something I had never seen before; 2 rainbows, a double rainbow as it were! It was amazing! Part of the top rainbow was obscured by clouds, and it wasn't as vivid and bright as the main one, which stretched right across the sky, but seeing then like that together blew my mind. Our world is so beautiful!
Jul 29, 2015 11:30 PM
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Can I ask you a question, Beth? Why did you use 'dragon' here? According to my text book, dragon is an evil monster in western culture. Is it because that you have been deeply infulenced by Chinese culture? Thank you.

 

                                                       《 两道彩虹》

 

    今天晚上我去附近的森林散步了。当我坐在那边思索着,享受着属于我的时间时,我看到了很多奇异的东西。首先,我在天看到了两互相追逐龙!我从小时候起,就再也没在天空寻找过如画的景色(Does 'picture' mean 'beautiful scenery in the sky'?)(那景象)真是有趣!回家路上我在一家小酒吧停下来,一杯啤酒。突然,天上下起了雨,不是一场大雨,只是一场清凉的阵雨。我在路上看到天上出现了一道美丽的彩虹。我拍了一些照片,但是,当我往前走,从不同的角度观察那道彩虹时,看到了自己从没见过的东西——两道彩虹,也可以说是一道双彩虹!这真是美极了!最高的彩虹一部分被云遮掩着,它没有下面彩虹鲜艳明亮。不过看见两道彩虹在一起,真是让我惊诧不已。我们的世界真是太漂亮了! 

July 30, 2015
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双层两道彩虹

 

今天晚上我去附近的森林散步了。在那里,当我坐着又想着,享受一点自我时间时,我看到l了很多了不起的东西。首先,我在天空里看到了两只龙互相追逐!我从小时候起,就再也没找过在天空里的云画,真是好玩儿!然后,回家路上我在一家小酒吧停下来喝一杯啤酒。突然下起了雨,不是一场大雨,只是一场清凉的阵雨。回家路上我在天空看到了一道美丽的彩虹。我拍了一些照片,但是,当我往前走时,从不同的角度看见那道彩虹时,看到了我从没见过的东西;两道彩虹,可以说是一道双彩虹!这真是美极了!最高的彩虹一部分被云遮掩着,它还没有下面彩虹的鲜艳或者明亮度,不过看见两道彩虹在一起,真是让我惊诧不已。我们的世界太漂亮了!

(I found this incredibly hard to translate into Chinese, so I am including the English as well).

I went for a walk this evening in the local woods 傍晚上, 我在一附近的小林散步,  and saw the most amazing things whilst just sitting, thinking and enjoying some of my me time. 在闲坐中, 在思維中, 在欣賞我的时间中, 看到 至神奇的东西.

First of all, 首先 I saw dragons chasing each other in the sky! I assume in a playful manner rather in mortal combat. 看見天上云如龍追蛟遊! Not having looked for pictures in the sky since I was a child, it was great fun. 自从小时, 已经沒有在天空找尋图画了所以觉得非常有趣. Then, on the way home I stopped for a pint in the local pub when it started to rain slightly. The rain wasn't heavy, just a nice summer drizzle, 回家中途, 在一间本地小酒巴喝一杯. 在这时, 开始夏雨霏霏.  and on the way home I spotted a gorgeous rainbow in the sky. 再起行时, 看到天上一彩虹, I snapped a photo or two, 就拍了一两張. but then as I walked on 而继续路程and looked from another angle, I saw something I had never seen before; 在此刻, 在另一度方向, 就看到我从所未見的天然奇跡 2 rainbows, a double rainbow as it were! - 一个双层虹霓It was amazing! 太神奇了Part of the top rainbow was obscured by clouds, 上层的部份被雲遮蓋and it wasn't as vivid and bright as the main one, which stretched right across the sky, 所以与横跨半天的重层显得不 太过生动和明亮but seeing then like that together blew my mind. 虽之, 能看到这鴛鴦虹, 真令我心惊震撼, Our world is so beautiful! 我们的世界太美了.


A very nice creative piece.

July 30, 2015
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两道彩虹

今天晚上我去附近的森林散步了。在那里,当我坐着又想着,享受一点自我时间时,我看到l了很多了不起的东西。首先,我在天空里看到了两只龙互相追逐!我从小时候起,就再也没找过在天空里的云画,真是好玩儿!然后,回家路上我在一家小酒吧停下来喝一杯啤酒。突然下起了雨,不是一场大雨,只是一场清凉的阵雨。回家路上我在天空看到了一道美丽的彩虹。我拍了一些照片,但是,当我往前走时,从不同的角度看见那道彩虹时,看到了我从没见过的东西;两道彩虹,可以说是一道双彩虹!这真是美极了!最高的彩虹一部分被云遮掩着,它还没有下面彩虹的鲜艳或者明亮度,不过看见两道彩虹在一起,真是让我惊诧不已。我们的世界太漂亮了!

 

今天晚上我<em>到</em>附近的<em>(小)</em>树林[1]散步。当我在那边坐着思考,享受一点自我时光时,我看到了非常奇妙的东西(<em>景象</em>)。起先,我看到两只龙在空中互相追逐!自从孩提时代起,我就再也没有寻找过空中的美景,真好玩!然后<em>(后来)</em>,回家路上(<em>回家途中</em>),我在一家小酒吧停下来喝一杯啤酒(<em>我走进一家小酒吧小酌了一下</em>)。<em>天空</em>突然下起了<em>毛毛细</em>雨,雨不大,只是<em>夏季</em>一场清凉的阵雨。<em>走出酒吧回家(的路)途中</em>,我看到<em>天空中出现了</em>一道美丽的彩虹[2]<em>(我看到一道美丽的彩虹悬挂在空中)</em>。我<em>随手</em>拍了一些照片。当我继续往前走,从另外的角度观察那道彩虹时,看到<em>(发现)</em>了自己从没见过的东西(<em>景色</em>)-两道彩虹,或者可以说是<em>(一模一样的)</em>双彩虹!这简直是太美妙了!下面的那道(彩虹)向右在空中划出了一道美丽的弧线,高处的那道虽然部分被云遮掩着,没有下面的那道明艳。不过,那一刻,看见同时出现的两道彩虹,<em>着实</em>让我惊诧不已。我们的世界如此美妙。

 

BTW:

改动部分有些没有完全按照英文版本直接翻译,添加了一些文学色彩。

这篇文章的用词非常的好(追逐、遮掩、惊诧不已......),这篇文章的内容也非常喜欢,非常具有画面感,给人imagination.

 

 

[1]

woods should be (小)树林 in Chinese. '森林‘ in Chinese is 'forest' in English.

[2]

I spotted a gorgeous rainbow in the sky.我看到空中出现了一道亮丽的彩虹。

I spotted a dog in the road.我看到路中央有一条狗。

I saw a duck in the river.我看到河里有一只鸭子。

I spotted a moon in the dark sky.我看到星空中挂着一轮明月。

在汉语中,对于'something + in + somewhere'这样的句式,最自然的翻译是“somewhere + 有/出现/ + something/sb”.

 

A problem:

I wonder if 'a pint' means '一杯'(a glass which will hold a pint (0.568 litres) of liquid ).

July 30, 2015
确实很美,我好长时间没见到过彩虹了。
July 30, 2015
Marvelous!both of your picture and Chinese .(希望我的这句话没有错误(^・ェ・^))
July 30, 2015
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