Report REPORT Introduction The aim of this report is to suggest the government how to improve my school area, which is in the middle of the countryside. Extracurricular activities My school need

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Report REPORT Introduction The aim of this report is to suggest the government how to improve my school area, which is in the middle of the countryside. Extracurricular activities My school needs sport facilities to do exercise on it, this would give the students the chance to do physical activities and create a team with friends or take part in a football competition, which is important because there are enough evidence about the good effects of doing exercise regularly in terms of avoiding the appearance of diseases. Increase number of classrooms This is an essential point, because there are only a few classrooms available to students and they find very uncomfortable being about to hundred people in the same room, therefore if we had more classrooms, we would be separate pupils in two or three courses and the teacher would be grateful because they could preparare the lessons to a low number of people with the purpose of making sure that they are understanding everything, which is difficult now with the crowded classrooms. Recommendation I recommend spending the money on providing sports facilities and new classrooms to the school, because it would have a beneficial effect on students' work in class.

Jul 30, 2015 2:04 PM

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Introduction
The aim of this report is to suggest to the government how to improve my school area, which is in the middle of the countryside.

Extracurricular activities
My school needs sport facilities to do exercise on it, this would give the students the chance to do physical activities and create a team with friends or take part in a football competition, which is important because there are is enough evidence about the good effects of doing exercise regularly in terms of avoiding the appearance of diseases (or avoiding ill health).

Increase the number of classrooms
This is an essential point, because there are only a few classrooms available to students and they find it very uncomfortable being about (or having around) to a (or two, depending on your meaning) hundred people in the same room, therefore if we had more classrooms, we would be able to separate pupils into two or three courses and the teacher would be grateful because they could preparare prepare the lessons to a lower number of people with the purpose of making sure that they are understanding everything, which is difficult now with the crowded classrooms.

Recommendation
I recommend spending the money on providing sports facilities and new classrooms to the school, because it would have a beneficial effect on students' work in class.

Excellent! My corrections are in red and my suggestions to sound more natural are in blue/grey.

"to suggest to the government how to improve" - you could also say "to make suggestions to the government on how to improve... (or about how to improve).

"sport facilities to do exercise on it" - Sport (or sports) facilities could be outdoor (such as a football field) or indoor (such as a gymnasium). So you could exercise on (outdoor field) or in (gymnasium). For this reason I suggested simply removing "on it" from your sentence. You could also have said "My school needs sports facilities for exercise (or for exercising)".

August 1, 2015

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