Sports

Hello!
Today I would like to talk about the sports. I don't remember my life without sports.
When I was 8 (years old), I began my sport's life. I was in on a local football (soccer?) team (football five -- no estoy seguro que esto significa...), I was playing in my town but some years later it I was playing for the whole community, and after that (Puedes usar, en lugar de "after that," la palabra, "afterwards." Significa la misma idea) I played throughout the country (Tienes unas pocas opciones aquí: "...community; and, after[wards] that, I played..." o, "...community. After[wards] that, I played..." Para mi, la manera más facil para explicar exactamante porque puedes hacerlo como así es porque hay pensamientos multiples, pero cada pensamiento es conectado con los otros. Es como una lista. Cada vez que tengas una lista de cosas en inglés--por ejemplo: "I need lettuce, tomato, and onion"--y la lista tiene un pensamiento entre los artículos, se usa un punto y coma--un "semicolon," en inglés (;). Por ejemplo: "I need tettuce [el princípio de la lista], not from the store, but from my garden [un pensamiento entre los artículos en la lista]<em>;</em> tomato<em>; </em>and onion." El concepto es muy similar con la frase la que escribiste. Tienes un pensamiento--"I was on a local football team, but"--un coma--"some years later I was playing for the whole community;"--y otro pensamiento entre el próximo pensamiento--"and, after that, ..." Ves lo que significo? Si vas a escribir la frase como un grande pensamiento, necesitas escribirla así. Pero, la alternativa es que uses un punto y se divide la frase en dos pensamientos: "...I was playing for the whole community. Afterwards, I played..."). Everyday I liked it more.
Then, I changed the sport sports; I began to play rugby. I liked rugby, (Tecnicamente, no lo necesitas el coma. Pero, con el coma es correcto también, y más seguro. Puedes incluir el coma para hacer los dos pensamientos muy claramente distintos--un pensamiento, "I liked rugby," y otro pensamiento "but I broke my knee..." etc.).  but I broke my knee and I decided to leave it.
When my knee was perfect, (<-- lo mismo aquí) I practiced a triathlon. It's fantastic, (<-- y otra vez aquí) but it is very expensive and hard.
Now, I will play to waterpolo. I will began begin the next week. I am sure I will like waterpolo will like very much.
One thing I think (esto me lo escucha incómodo... Diría yo simplemente, "However," o, "One thing I will say is [that]), I don't like the gym; it's boring to me. I really like sports (en otras palabras, prefieres los deportes--"I prefer sports) with team-mates teammates.
Do not you believe it? (Qué estás intentar a decir aquí? Estás preguntar si la persona leyendo está de acuerdo? O si la puede creer que no te gusta el gimnasio?)

<em>Hello! Today I would like to talk about sports. I don't remember my life without sports. When I was 8 years old, I began my sport's life. I was on a local football team (football five), but some years later I was playing for the whole community; afterwards, I played throughout the country! Everyday I liked it more. Then, I changed sports; I began to play rugby. I liked rugby, but I broke my knee and I decided to leave it. When my knee was perfect, I practiced a triathlon. It's fantastic, but it is very expensive and hard. Now, I will play waterpolo. I will begin next week. I am sure I will like waterpolo very much. However, one thing I will say is that I don't like the gym; it's boring to me. I really like/prefer sports with teammates. Don't you agree?/ Can/Do you believe it/that?</em>