Jessica
What do you think about physical appearence? Have you ever known someone worried about their physical appearence? Nowadays, many people have this "problem", and I call "problem" because, in my opinion, in some people can be an obsession. There are extremely skinny people and extremely fat people. On the one hand, I don't understand first type, because they think they need to reduce their weight to have a good look. This can suppose a health problem. I don't understand how this people can come to worsen their health to "improve" their physical. On the other hand, extremely fat people have a problem too, because this people don't care about their physical appearence,so they tend to gain weight. I think although don't care their look shouldn't stop worrying about your health. Remember that everyone have date to expiry, because we aren't immortals yet. Really I don't know if we are moving forward or backward...
Aug 1, 2015 1:49 AM
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What do you think about physical appearence?

Have you ever known someone who was worried about their physical appearance?
Nowadays, many people have this problem, and I call it a "problem," because in my opinion, in some people can have an obsession with it.

There are extremely skinny people and extremely fat people.

On the one hand, I don't understand the first group, because they think they need to reduce their weight, in order to look good. This can cause a health problems. I don't understand how these people can think that worsening their health can "improve" their physical appearance.

On the other hand, extremely fat people have a problem too, because these people don't care about their physical appearence,so they tend to gain weight. I think that although they don't care about their looks, they shouldn't stop worrying about their health.

Remember... that everyone has an expiration date ("we're all going to die sometime" - this phrase is more common), because for no one has reached immortality.

really don't know if we are moving forward or backward.

August 1, 2015

What do you think about physical appearence?

Have you ever known someone worried about their physical appearence?
Nowadays, many people have this "problem", and I call it a "problem" because, in my opinion, in (for) some people it can be an obsession.
There are extremely skinny people and extremely fat people.

On the one hand, I don't understand the first type, because they think they need to reduce their weight to have a good look. This can suppose (become, be the start of, turn into)a health problem. **I don't understand how this people can come to worsen their health to "improve" their physical.

**I don't understand why these people want to worsen their health to "improve" their physical appearance.

**I don't understand how this type of person wants to worsen their health to "improve" their physique.

On the other hand, extremely fat people have a problem too, because this (these) people don't care about their physical appearence,so they tend to gain weight. I think although they don't care about their looks they shouldn't stop worrying about your (their) health.

Remember that everyone have (has) a date to expiry (expire),because we aren't immortals yet.

Really I don't know if we are moving forward or backward...

 

***********Not bad, I just added a few corrections there for spelling and grammar, ones in yellow should be changed to the green in parenthesis and the other green ones just should be there for the sentence. The one sentence I wrote 2 other ways you can write your sentence with the same meaning just a little different.**************

August 1, 2015
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