alessandro cecchetto
THE PATH TOWARD YOURSELF 2 We are afraid of being alone and we try to cover our loneliness through fake and unhealthy relationships, through drugs, through religion, everything that seems to fill the hole we have within ourselves.. but this mechanism doesn’t seem to work properly just because in all our attempts to be happy we look for happiness outside ourselves, we basically put our moods in the hands of others.. either a lover or a child or someone.. Can you believe that? Well, you will be endlessly disappointed sooner or later because you are not in control of what is outside so you cannot be sure of what is going to happen, that would make you anxious,worried, restlessly looking for a security you will never have simply because it doesn’t exist. Take you risks, be yourself ALWAYS because you can make all the mistakes you want and be happy if you follow your inner path, don’t be another person, don’t waste what is your nature and your dreams, you are unique so just simply perfect.Under my heavy and written sheet of old paper I am still thirsty, empty, eagernessly ready to take a sip of life from a different flask,now.
Aug 1, 2015 4:59 PM
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I find your realization about being that true self interesting to read. Cheers!
August 2, 2015

We are afraid of being alone and we try to cover our loneliness through fake and unhealthy relationships, through drugs, through religion and everything that seems to fill the hole we have within ourselves.. but this mechanism doesn’t seem to work properly, just because in all of our attempts to be happy, we look for happiness outside ourselves, we basically put our moods in the hands of others.. either a lover, or a child or someone else.. Can you believe that? Well, you will be endlessly disappointed sooner or later, because you are not in control of what is outside, so you cannot be sure of what is going to happen, that would make you anxious, worried, restlessly looking for a security you will never have, simply because it doesn’t exist. Take you risks, be yourself ALWAYS, because you can make all the mistakes you want and be happy if you follow your inner path, don’t be another person, don’t waste what is your nature and your dreams, you are unique so just and simply perfect (or your uniqueness is simply perfect). Under my heavy old sheets of written paper, I am still thirsty, empty, and eagerly ready to take a sip of life from a different flask now.

 

Just some suggestions to improve your text... take care

August 1, 2015

THE PATH TOWARD YOURSELF 2

We are afraid of being alone and we try to cover mask our loneliness ("Cover" isn't bad here, but "mask" might be better.) through fake and unhealthy relationships, through drugs, through religion, everything anything (Because you're talking about many options, but only a couple of which any single person might use.) that seems to fill the hole we have within ourselves.. but this mechanism doesn’t seem to work properly, just because (I would use "because" by itself here, but you could say something like "simply because." "Just because" doesn't feel quite right.) in all our attempts to be happy, we look for happiness outside of (You can say "outside ourselves," but it's pretty casual sounding. In general, "outside" should be followed by "of" if you're following it with a noun.) ourselves,. we We basically put our moods in the hands of others.. either a lover or a child or someone.. Can you believe that? Well, you will be endlessly disappointed sooner or later (It sounds odd to combine "endlessly" with "sooner or later" because the former suggests something that has been occurring and always will occur, while the latter suggests something that will happen once in the future.) because you are not in control of what is outside of yourself (If you just say "outside," it sounds like you're talking about not being indoors.) so you cannot be sure of what is going to happen,. that That would will ("Would" sounds odd because you're talking about something that will happen in the future.) make you anxious, and/or worried, (Your list here consists only of "anxious" and "worried." "Looking" isn't part of that list because it's not an adjective. Since you only have two items in your list, you should combine them with "and" or "or," not a comma.) restlessly looking for a security you will never have simply because it doesn’t exist. Take you risks, ALWAYS be yourself, ALWAYS ("Always" can be placed in either location, but it sounds more natural at the beginning of this clause.) because you can make all the mistakes you want and be happy if you follow your inner path,. don’t Don't be another person,; don’t waste what is your nature and your dreams,. (This last part sounds odd but I can't suggest a correction because I don't know what you mean by "wasting your nature" nor "wasting your dreams.") you You are unique, so just so simply perfect.Under my heavy and written sheet (What do you mean by "written sheet"? This sounds odd.) of old paper, I am still thirsty, empty, eagernessly eagerly ready to take a sip of life from a different flask, now.

August 1, 2015
And I'll gladly join you in that sip my friend! Sante.
August 1, 2015
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