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Today was very fun Today was very fun! I went drinking with my sister, my mother, our friend and her mother. We're friends from elementary school. So, the friend is very funny!! I have been tired because I laughed all the time there! By the way, I like to drink occasionally. But I can't hold my alcohol... I heard from somebody that many Japanese people get drunk easily. I don't disagree with that, but my mother and the friend can drink a lot... I envy them a little.
Aug 25, 2015 5:33 PM
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Today was very fun

Today was very fun!

I went drinking with my sister, my mother, our friend and her mother.
We're friends from elementary school.

So, my friend is very funny!! I have been tired because I laughed all the time there!

By the way, I like to drink occasionally. But I can't hold my alcohol...

I heard from somebody that many Japanese people get drunk easily.
I don't disagree with that, but my mother and my friend can drink a lot...

I envy them a little.

 

Excellent English, "I can't hold my alcohol" is very natural. Spoken like a true native speaker!!

August 26, 2015

Today was very fun

Today was very fun!

I went drinking with my sister, my mother, our friend and her mother.
We're friends from elementary school.

So, the my friend is very funny!! I am now have been tired because I laughed the entire time she was there all the time there!

By the way, I also like to drink occasionally. But I can't hold my alcohol...

I heard from somebody that many some Japanese people get drunk easily.
I don't disagree with that, but my mother and the my friend can drink a lot...

I envy them a little.

August 25, 2015

Today was very fun

Today was very fun!

I went drinking with my sister, my mother, our friend and her mother.
We're friends from elementary school.

So, the my friend is very funny!! I have been am now tired because I laughed the entire time all the time there!

By the way, I like to drink occasionally. But I can't hold<em>/handle</em> my alcohol...

I heard from somebody that many Japanese people get drunk easily.
I don't disagree with that, but my mother and the my friend can drink a lot...

I envy them a little.

 

Added word

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August 25, 2015

Today was very great fun

Today was very great fun!

I went drinking with my sister, my mother, our friend and her mother.
We're/We have been friends from/since elementary school.

So, the time with friends is wonderful very funny!! <em>(fun and funny are quite different!)</em> I have been am tired now because I laughed all the time there!

By the way, I like to drink occasionally. But I can't hold my alcohol...

I heard from somebody that many Japanese people get drunk easily.
I don't disagree with that, but my mother and the friend can drink a lot...

I envy them a little.

October 13, 2015
look first use connection words then elaborate your story in words it will easy for others to write out your mistakes,,,,,,,good,,,keep it up
August 25, 2015
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