on remote natural environment traveling
Nowadays both scientists and tourists can go to remote natural environments such as the South Pole. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
I think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.
Thirsting to explore new things is a noble spirit[1] of human beings, that brings new discoveries by science or establishes a new country by exploring new land, in the case of America history. Who knows what will be present to our views by travelling to remote natural environments? Maybe just personal totally freedom experiment or great desire to conquer nature, then begin or continue a wonderful life; or maybe increase our more and more knowledge about those strange areas. whatever, people should admire those brave people who walk through a dangerous place without knowing what situation might be encountered. They might die or get badly injured, it is never easy for great things to happen.
In fact, some places like the South Pole are so cold, the weather is so tough, and have other challenging situations such as lack of food, and hotels and so on, only a few people who have enough prepared for it for a long time and trained can get there. Glory belongs to those people and they know this honor. Some of them should become heroes in our times. No matter how we encourage common citizens to travel to these tough places, I think, just a few people will respond to it with passion and most of us will refuse to attempt these kinds of visits purely for personal safety.
In conclusion, travelling to remote natural environments should be popular in some circles that always be with exploring spirit and have enough money and good training. I hope those scientists will bring us big discoveries or some surprise events, just like national geographic channel on TV or what NASA is doing (though we cant go to deep space, but we can walk to most places on the earth ). maybe there will be some sacrifices, but it is worthy and valuable.
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blue is where I don't know what you are trying to say, or can't think of a word or phrase to put use in this sentence form.
I strongly suggest you work to get your language more natural. You are trying to use complicated words, but don't have the basic grammar right, which makes it very hard to understand and correct. Also by trying to use complicated words, you are sometimes choosing inappropriate words and phrases. I suggest you get the grammar right first, then try to add the vocabulary. Double check your singular/plural, and make sure the verbs match. Get your adjectival forms right.
I appreciate that you probably want to demonstrate your vocabulary, but if you don't have the words in the right place as well, you may loose more points by using them inappropriately, than you do by using them at all.
on remote natural environment traveling
Nowadays both scientists and tourists can go to (any) remote natural environments such as the South Pole. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
I think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.
Thirsting to explore new things is a noble spirit of the human nature, that brings new discoveries by science or uncovers a new country, for example the discovery of America. Who knows what we can experience by traveling to remote natural environments? Maybe just a personal totally freedom experiment or a need to conquer nature, maybe to begin a new or continue a wonderful life, or even to become more and more knowledgeable about these strange areas. Whatever the reason, people should admire those brave people that walk through a danger place never knowing what situation they could encounter. They could experience injuries or be fatally hurt, great explorations and discoveries are never easy.
In fact, some place like South Pole the environment,weather and other conditions such as lack of natural and available food and extreme living conditions (no hotels) makes it hard for anyone to just travel there easily, only a few people that have prepared enough for a long time and trained can arrive there. Glory belongs to those people and they know this honor. Some of them will become a hero in our times. No matter how we encourage common citizens to travel to these tough place, I think, only a few people will response with passion and most of us will refuse to accept these challenges because of personal safety.
In conclusion, remote natural environment travelling would be popular in some circles of people that have that exploring spirit, have enough money and good training. I hope scientist will bring us big discoveries or some surprising events, just like on national geography channel on TV or what NASA is doing currently (although we can't go to deep space we can walk most places on the earth ). Maybe there will be some sacrifice, but it wil be worthy and valuable.
(I can't edit my notetext after published. so I rewrite it again)
