IELST Wrighting task:if it is fair that successful sports professionals can get more money

nowadays,with the delelopment of economy,a social issue came out,famous sports stars can get more money than people in other important areas.
some people believed that it is not fair at all for the following reasons.firstly,people in some important professions like scientist,they devoted their whole life to the challengable and boring studies,their contributions can make a difference to the world.For example,scientist invited robots,which is laborplacing.they made such contribution but can not gain equal payback.what is more,it has great disadvantage for people to build the right values in their mind,especially to children,they may think only sports careers are the best,because sportsman can get more money.
Some people think it is fair enough of course,successful sports professionals work harder in their aresa,the deserve high payment.the public as well as press pay a great attention to the sports professions,people can gain a sence of national pround and belongings if athlete have good awards in the international games.
AS far as I am concerned ,it is not fair for successful sports professionals to get higher payment.People who are succeed in other important professions should struggle for their own rights to get equal payment and the goverment should make measures to ensure that those people are able to get more money.

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IELST Writing task:if it is fair that successful sports professionals can get more money

nowadays,with the delelopment of economy,a social issue came out,famous sports stars can get more money than people in other important areas.
some people believed that it is not fair at all for the following reasons.firstly,people in some important professions like scientist,they devoted their whole life to the challengable and boring studies,their contributions can make a difference to the world.For example,scientist invited robots,which is laborplacing.they made such contribution but can not gain equal payback.what is more,it has great disadvantage for people to build the right values in their mind,especially to children,they may think only sports careers are the best,because sportsman can get more money.
Some people think it is fair enough of course,successful sports professionals work harder in their aresa,the deserve high payment.the public as well as press pay a great attention to the sports professions,people can gain a sence of national pround and belongings if athlete have good awards in the international games.
AS far as I am concerned ,it is not fair for successful sports professionals to get higher payment.People who are succeed in other important professions should struggle for their own rights to get equal payment and the goverment should make measures to ensure that those people are able to get more money.