Flora
Monday Today is Monday. I got up at 7:00 a.m. After I ate my breakfast. I planned what I need to do this week. Today I want to finish my report , and let me have some time doing exercise, and I can do something what I like after work. I like watching movie , learning English, doing sport , and etc.
Aug 31, 2015 5:01 AM
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Monday

Today is Monday. I got up at 7:00 a.m. After I ate my breakfast, I planned what I need to do this week.
Today I want to finish my report, and let me have some time to doing exercise, and I can want to do something what I like after work. I like watching movies, learning English, doing sport, among other things. and etc.

August 31, 2015
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Monday

 

Today is Monday. I got up at 7:00 a.m.

Good.

 

After I ate my breakfast. I planned what I need to do this week.

Good.

 

Today I want to finish my report , and let me have some time doing exercise, and I can do something what I like after work.

Today I want to finish my report , and let me to have some time doing for exercise, and I can to do something what I like after work.

Parallel construction: I want to V, to V, and to V.

 

I like watching movie , learning English, doing sport , and etc.

I like watching movies, learning English, doing sports , and etc.

Good parallel construction:  I like V-ing, V-ing, V-ing, etc.

Don't need "and".  "etcetera" already has that meaning.

August 31, 2015
Thank you .Walter.
August 31, 2015
This is a nice paragraph, very easy to understand. Sounds like you are busy!
August 31, 2015
Where are you?
August 31, 2015
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