Tanya
大家好 (^ー^)ノ 今天学中文。 我爱中文。我来的中文学院。我姓Tanya。我有爸爸, 妈妈。再见!
Aug 31, 2015 6:13 AM
Corrections · 16

大家好 (^ー^)ノ

今天学中文。 我爱中文。我来的中文学院。我姓Tanya。我有爸爸, 妈妈。再见!

 

今天学中文!我爱中文,它十分美好。我来到中文学院学习。我姓Tanya,家里有爸爸,妈妈和我。再见!

 

This is a very lovely, brief , straightforward mini article, very good! 

 

Here I followed your style, only added a reason for loving Chinese language. I added a complement for the third sentence to make the grammartical structure complete.The addings make the rhythm of your talk becoming slower. Do remember that Chinese is a rather musical, melodic language, like Bollywood!:) I used different punctuation, to let you be excitedly in and excitedly coming out:0). Of course you can punctuate your article in another way to express different mood, emotions and personality, that supposed to be freedom. Only one mistake with using verb ”来“ ; it is vi. here. And " ”家里有......" is a very popular, sweet way for introducing one's family.

 

OK, this is just a new start, Tanya. Gradually you will sing and dance your Bollywood of Chinese words more beautifully! 祝你成功!

 

Susan

August 31, 2015

大家好 (^ー^)ノ

今天(我)学中文。I learned/studied Chinese today. ‘了’ is often used, when you want to describe something that happened in the past.

我爱/我喜欢中文。I love/like Chinese. Often I use '喜欢'.

会去中文学院。I will go to the college of Chinese. Are you sure you meant 'the college/university of Chinese, not the college/university in China(中国的大学).'?

我姓Tanya。My family name/last name is Tanya.

我家里有三口人,爸爸、妈妈和我。There are three members in my family, my father, my mother and I.(If it is four members, then 爸爸、妈妈、姐姐/哥哥和我。)

再见!

September 1, 2015

大家好 (^ー^)ノ

今天学中文。 我爱中文。我来的中文学院。我Tanya。我有爸爸, 妈妈。再见!

 

我今天(开始)学中文,我喜欢中文,我(第一天)来到中院,我叫Tanya,(和我一起来的)还有我爸爸妈妈?谢谢。

 

August 31, 2015
I wanted to say "I will go to University of chinese"
September 1, 2015

大家好 (^ー^)ノ

今天学中文。 我爱中文。我来的中文学院。我姓Tanya。我有爸爸, 妈妈,还有我。再见!

 

not bad! 加油!

August 31, 2015
Show more
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!