in the dark
When I stared to live an independent life and take responsibilities for my current, as well as future, life, I was so excited and full of energy because I thought I could pursue my dreams in the exact way I wanted. I sought to make sure every second in my life held worth. Yet, it was not long before I realized that I was not totally in control of myself, there wasn't anyone to hold me back or something. The enemy who was putting my enthusiasm down was me, the demon part of me. The dark of the night is not scary to me, but I was soaked in the dark that fall with the demon in my heart, I was starting to worry about myself. I'm still in this dark, and the only weapon I have is the faith that not to not give up on myself. It's really a terrible war I am in. But, still I can't give up, maybe life is all about hanging in there.
The underlined part is a run on sentence. It can be fixed by adding a period in between two individual thoughts.