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My parents Yesterday,I had a video call with my parents.Athough we often have video call ,I was impressed by last night. My mom asked me whether it was very cold in qinhuangdao and she said that "baby,if you felt cold , you should wear enough clothes and didn't feel sick ".i was deeply touched by my mom's love .i said that I'm fine and I can take good care of myself don't worry about me.then ,my father said "you haveto study hard in university only by doing that can you find a good job and we will live a happy life .i answered that "dad ,I know what to do as a student and I also know what I want to do in future."it seems that my father satisfied with my answer and I can saw his coners of the mouth has smile .just for a while ,my father told me to eat healthy food and took care of myself.my father always like that ,strict with lots of father's love . I said "mom and dad ,I hope you can eat and buy what you like no matter how much money it will be paid and don't have to save money for me ,don't worry about me and take care of yourselves.i miss you very much ." My father 's love like mountain and my mother 's love like water ,both of love makes me feel sweet.
Oct 6, 2015 2:22 AM
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My parents

 

Yesterday, I had a video call with my parents. Athough we often have video call, I was impressed particularly affected by last night's call.


My mom asked me whether it was very cold in Qinhuangdao and she said that "baby, darling ("baby" sounds more like something that woud be said to a girlfriend, so "darling" seems more appropriate) if you felt feel cold you should wear enough plenty of clothes and didn't feel so that you don't get sick  (or "catch a cold"). I was deeply touched by my mom's love . I said that I'm fine and I can take good care of myself, don't worry about me. Then my father said "you have to study hard in university. Only by doing that can you find a good job and we will live a happy life. I answered that "dad, I know what to do as a student and I also know what I want to do in future." It seems that my father was satisfied with my answer and I can could saw see the his corners of the his mouth has rise up in a smile. Just for a while , My father also  told me to eat healthy food and took take care of myself. My father is always like that, strict but with lots of fatherly love . I said "mom and dad, I hope you can eat and buy what you like no matter how much money it costs will be paid and you don't have to save money for me. Don't worry about me and take care of yourselves. I miss you very much ."

 

My father's love is like a mountain and my mother's love is like water. Both of Their love makes me feel sweet. warm inside.


Good, but doun't forget that you have to use CAPITAL letters at the beginning of sentences.

October 7, 2015
I do not have time to correct but let me say that the last line really hit me. "My father 's love like mountain and my mother 's love like water ,both of love makes me feel sweet." This sentence needs little correction but I love your description of mountain for your dad and water for your mom - really great stuff !
October 6, 2015
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