Story Hello! I am writing a short story, this is another part of it. I would appreciate any help with the grammar. Thank you! 火林和龙息 龙息非常兴奋到达城市。他的朋友们告诉他的这个元宵，但是他从来没能去。他穿他最喜欢的颜色：橙色。龙息看了很多的不同的灯笼。有大灯笼

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Story Hello! I am writing a short story, this is another part of it. I would appreciate any help with the grammar. Thank you! 火林和龙息龙息非常兴奋到达城市。他的朋友们告诉他的这个元宵，但是他从来没能去。他穿他最喜欢的颜色：橙色。龙息看了很多的不同的灯笼。有大灯笼，小灯笼，也有灯笼的不同颜色。他到达一个舞会在中心的城市。以前他没有看很多的食物！烤鸭是龙息最的喜欢的食物他。宴会有比他可以吃的多。他吃了很多和听这个音乐。他很快乐和他忘了他的怕。当他跳舞，龙息撞上了火林。 Long Xi was very excited when he arrived to the city. His friends told him about the Lantern Festival, but he was never able to go before. He was wearing his favorite color: orange. Long Xi looked at all the different lanterns. There were big lanterns, small ones, and ones of many different colors. Finally, Long Xi reached the ball in the center of the city. He had never seen so much food before! Roast duck was his favorite food. The banquet table had more roast duck than he could eat. Long Xi ate so much while he listened to the festival music. He was feeling very happy and forgot about his fear. While he was dancing he bumped into Huo Lin.

Oct 8, 2015 1:09 PM

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Hello! I am writing a short story, this is another part of it. I would appreciate any help with the grammar. Thank you!

火林和龙息
龙息非常兴奋到达城市到达这个城市的时候，他很兴奋。他的朋友们告诉他的这个元宵节，但是他之前从来没能去过。他身上穿着他最喜欢的颜色：橙色。龙息看了很多的不同的灯笼。有大灯笼，小灯笼，也有灯笼的不同各种颜色的灯笼。最后他到达了市中心的一个舞会在中心的城市。以前他从来没有看到过很这么多的食物！烤鸭是龙息最的喜欢的食物他。宴会上有比他可以吃掉的更多的烤鸭。伴随着节日音乐他吃了很多和听这个音乐。他很快乐和并且他忘了他的怕恐惧。当他跳舞的时候，龙息撞上了火林。

Long Xi was very excited when he arrived to the city. His friends told him about the Lantern Festival, but he was never able to go before. He was wearing his favorite color: orange. Long Xi looked at all the different lanterns. There were big lanterns, small ones, and ones of many different colors. Finally, Long Xi reached the ball in the center of the city. He had never seen so much food before! Roast duck was his favorite food. The banquet table had more roast duck than he could eat. Long Xi ate so much while he listened to the festival music. He was feeling very happy and forgot about his fear. While he was dancing he bumped into Huo Lin.

U speak chinese very well now~~~And i believe that u do not need to translate every word into one chinese word, and plz be careful with the positions of the elements in a sentence~~

Anyway, well done~~~

October 8, 2015

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