5 things I love about Hawaii — Part 2

Now I’m finishing up the rest of the list of things I love about Hawaii from the last entry.


4. Tropical fruits & smoothies

I LOVE fresh fruits, especially mangos. However, since Japan is not a tropical island, we don’t have much many tropical fruits here. Mangos are quite small but very expensive in Japan. In Hawaii, you can get big fresh mangos, as well as many other kinds of tropical fruits, easily with for a reasonable price and many kinds of tropical fruits as well. Also, there are many good smoothyie places, too. So, everyday, I enjoyed fresh tropical fruits and smoothies during my stay on Oahu.

- Your English is so good, all there is to fix is little things. There are probably a lot of English speakers who wouldn't know when to use much vs. many, but in general, many is for describing things that can be counted and much is for things that can't be counted. http://grammarist.com/usage/many-much/

- By putting "easily for a reasonable price" at the end of the sentence it makes it more clear that mangos and other fruits are BOTH easy to get and reasonably priced. I know what you mean in your sentence, but it is not that clear if other fruits are cheap as well. 

5. How people treat wild animals there

When I participated in one of the snorkelling tours by a local company, the guides stopped our mortar motor boat in the middle of the sea, keeping an(should be "a" here if I left it) enough distance ( a little away ) from a group of wild dolphins they found, and let us dive into the sea and swim to the dolphins. I suppose they didn’t want to surprise or accidentally hurt the dolphins by approaching too close to them by with the boat. I liked how they had some consideration for the dolphins.

When I took part in one of the dolphin watching tours in Kyushu region in Japan last year, the guides took us to the offshore, where wild dolphins were, by a mortar motor boat in the same way as the Hawaiian guides did. However, one thing was totally different. They stopped the boat close to a group of the dolphins so that we could see it clearly without binoculars. And then, as the dolphins moved away, they drove the boat to chase them. And there were also another three boats surrounding the dolphins to watch. So, basically, including our boat, four boats were surrounding and chasing the dolphins at a short distance together. I was able to see the dolphins clearly, very close by, with excitement, but at the same time, I was also kind of afraid that they might get hurt by the boats driving too close to them. The boats’ engines sounded rather loud, and the whole picture of the four boats chasing the group of the dolphins didn’t look good to me. This must have been quite stressful tofor the dolphins. I would have been happier if the guides had stopped the engine to wait and see the dolphins passing by, instead of chasing.

( Ahh, I was going to mention how people in Hawaii teat endangered turtles but it’s getting way too long and it’s probably better if I just stop here. )

Thus, I like the way people in Hawaii treat the wild animals there.

I'm glad you enjoyed Hawaii! Always nice to hear things about my home!

5 things I love about Hawaii — Part 2

Now I’m I'll finishing up describing the rest of the list of things I love about Hawaii from the last entry.


4. Tropical fruits & smoothies

I LOVE fresh fruits, especially mangoes. However, since Japan is not a tropical island, we don’t have much many tropical fruits here. Mangoes are quite small but ("yet" sounds more natural) very expensive in Japan. In Hawaii, you can get big fresh mangoes easily with for a reasonable price and many other kinds of tropical fruits as well. Also, there are many good smoothyie places, too (you already used "also" at the beginning of the sentence). So, everyday, I enjoyed fresh tropical fruits and smoothies during my stay on Oahu. (This last sentence sounds a bit unnatural. "So I enjoyed fresh tropical fruit and smoothies every day while I was in Oahu.") 

5. How people treat wild animals there (Or: "Treatment of wild animals")

When I participated in one of snorkelling tours by a local company the local snorkelling tours, the guides stopped our mortar boat (is it a war boat?) in the middle of the sea, keeping an enough distance (a little ways away) from a group of wild dolphins they found, and let us dive into the sea and swim to the dolphins. I suppose they didn’t want to surprise or accidentally hurt the dolphins by approaching too close to them by with the boat. I liked how they had some consideration for the dolphins. (More natural: "I liked how considerate they were of the dolphins.")

When I took part in one of the dolphin-watching tours in the Kyushu region in of Japan last year, the guides took us to the offshore by mortar boat where to some wild dolphins were by a mortar boat in the same way as the Hawaiian guides did. However, one thing was totally ("completely" sounds more natural) different. They stopped the boat close to a group of the dolphins so that we could see it clearly without binoculars. And then, as the dolphins moved away, they drove the boat to chase them. And there were also another three other boats surrounding the dolphins to watch them. So, basically, including our boat, together four boats were surrounding and chasing the dolphins at a short distance together. I was able to see the dolphins clearly, very close by, at a close distance. with excitement It was exciting but at the same time, I was also kind of afraid that they might get hurt by the boats driving too close to them. The boats’ engines sounded rather loud, and the whole picture image of the four boats chasing the a group of the dolphins didn’t look good to me (Or: "didn't sit well with me"). This must have been quite stressful to for the dolphins. I would have been happier if the guides had stopped the engine to wait and see the dolphins passing by, instead of chasing them.

(Ahh, I was going to mention how people in Hawaii treat endangered turtles but it’s getting way too long and it’s probably better if I just stop here.)

Thus (Basically/Essentially/In summary), I like the way people in Hawaii treat the wild animals there (More natural: "how they treat their wild animals").

Notes:

Your English is already extremely good so I thought that I would correct your entry to sound like native English. I apologize for all the corrections!