Cecilia
Today This afternoon,I'm going to work in the library with my roommate.Because of the wrong arrange,the job didn't start.So we go to the city centre. Today is so cold.When I walk on the street,I wish I can wrap a quilt.I have never seen snow,I hope this city will have snow.
Nov 26, 2015 3:08 PM
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Today

This afternoon,I'm going to work in the library with my roommate.Because of the wrong arrange (arrangement),the job didn't start  (I didn't get the job) .So we go (went) to the city centre. Today is (It was) so cold (today).When I walk (walked) on the street (earlier today) ,I wish (wished) I can (could) wrap a quilt (around my body).I have never seen snow,I hope this city will have snow (eventually).

 

1. Arrange is a verb, but arrangment is a noun. 

2. In English, there are tenses to take note of, unlike Chinese. So, when you write about something that happened earlier in the day, you need to use the past tense. 

3. I would avoid starting a sentence with the word 'Because'.

 

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November 26, 2015
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