My Trips Once upon the time, a little boy lived at Saint Brévin les Pins. During his youth he stayed here and knew his town. Then, he grew up and he had to leave his region for his military servic

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My Trips Once upon the time, a little boy lived at Saint Brévin les Pins. During his youth he stayed here and knew his town. Then, he grew up and he had to leave his region for his military service. His regiment was at Compiègne, in the north of Paris. It was his first trip. Later, for his job, he traveled in Belgium and different towns in France (Creil, Paris, Bordeaux, Nevers, Brest, Quimper for exemples) Since , we have crossed, (my wife and me), we have traveled in France during our holidays. We explored some departments and have visited some places. We have eaten all foods and had tasted to regional products, of course we have drunk , also many specialities. And we must eat … Last year, we visited, for a week, the Auvergne. We stayed in different hotels between Mont Dore and Super Besse. My wife and I drove the car in turns. It was in Summer. Then, this year, in January, we returned to Super Besse for skiing. It was different to Summer, of course, the landscape was all white. We have kept some good souvenirs. Since Wednesday, it has snowed

Nov 29, 2015 7:42 AM

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My Trips

Once upon the a time, a little boy lived at Saint Brévin les Pins.
During his youth he stayed here and knew his town.
Then, he grew up and he had to leave his region for his the military service.
His regiment was at Compiègne, in the north of Paris.
It was his first trip.
Later, for his job, he traveled in Belgium and different towns in France (Creil, Paris, Bordeaux, Nevers, Brest, Quimper for exemples example)

until this phrase, you use the third person " a little boy", you should continue the story with him. Or you should tell the whole story in the first person "I/me".

Since , we our paths have crossed with my wife, (my wife and me), we have traveled in France during our holidays. We explored some departments cities (?) and have visited some places. We have eaten all kinds of food s and hadve tasted to regional products, of course we have drunk , also many specialities. And we must eat …

(the last sentence doesn't make sense, try to say it in another way)

Last year, we visited,for a week, the Auvergne for a week. We stayed in different hotels between Mont Dore and Super Besse. My wife and I drove the car in turns. It was in Summer.
Then, this year, in January, we returned to Super Besse for skiing. It was different to Summer,(than summer or) in winter, of course, the landscape was all white. We have kept some good souvenirs.
Since Wednesday, it has snowed (once? twice? the whole week?)

(the last sentence seems out of place, or like your story got cut in the middle.)

Good job! Keep the stories coming!

November 29, 2015

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