Young Rim
would you check my words? I enjoy traveling abroad. before a trip, i usually make a itinerary. it make me save the time and don't be confused. I make sure to bring my cell-phone. Because it would be a map, a camera and a music playar while I travel. Thank you for read my sentence and please teach me~.
Nov 30, 2015 3:59 PM
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would you check my words?

I enjoy traveling abroad.
Before a trip, I usually make a an itinerary. It make helps me to save the time and don't not be confused.
I make sure to bring my cell-phone, because it would be will serve as a map, a camera and a music playar while I travel.

Thank you for reading my sentences and please teach me~.

 

There are several ways to correct some of your sentences, I just noted what I would say if I was talking here in America with a friend. 

November 30, 2015
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Would you check my words?

I enjoy traveling abroad.
Before a trip, I usually make an itinerary. It make me saves the me time* and prevents me from don't being {better="getting"} confused.
I make sure to bring my cell-phone. Because it would be serve as a map, a camera and a music player while I travel.

Thank you for reading my sentence and please teach correct me~.

 

*"Makes me (do something)" has an implication that you are being forced to do something"

November 30, 2015
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Would you check my words?

I enjoy traveling abroad.
Before a trip, I usually make an itinerary. It makes me save the time and not get confused.
I make sure to take my cell-phone because it is a map, a camera and a music player while I travel.

Thank you for reading my sentence and please teach me~.

 

Hello Rim,

 

The modern phone is certainly a great aid to travelling these days, it can also help you with translating too!

Just a few mistakes. Remember that 'I' in front of a verb is always a capital (big) 'I'. Always start sentences with a capital letter and you used the correct article 'a' for 'itinerary' but because it begins with a vowel sound you need to use 'an'. It is the same for all vowel sounds.

 

Hope this helps

 

Bob

Bob

November 30, 2015
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Would you Check my Writing (words)?

I enjoy travelling abroad.
Before a trip, usually make an (a) itinerary. in order to (it make me) save (the) time and ensure I don't get lost. (be confused.) 
I make sure to take (bring) my cell-phone as it acts as (. Because it would be) a map, a camera and a music player (playar) while I travel.

Thank you for reading my sentences; (and) please correct (teach) me~.

November 30, 2015
1

would you check my words?

I enjoy traveling abroad.
before a trip, i usually make an itinerary. it make me save the time saves (me) time and don't be get (아니면 become) confused.
I make sure to bring my cell-phone because it would be works as a map, a camera and a music player while I travel.

Thank you for reading my sentences. Please teach me~.

 

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November 30, 2015
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