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made sam's notebook entry: Jan 04, 2011

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I read news about a anorexia model who passed away a few day ago. she weighed just 27kg. how can u believe that!!!
Eventhough when she was young tried to stay thin, but later on, she campaigned to raise awareness of anorexa and dagers of eating disorders. she tried many time to defeat anorexia but fail.
we should think about banning Size zoro models in fashion industry to protect healthy girls and women.
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made sam's notebook entry: Jan 04, 2011

I read the news about an anorexia model who passed away a few day ago. She weighed just 27kg. Can you believe that?!
 
Eventhough when she was young she tried to stay thin, but later on, she campaigned to raise awareness of anorexia and the dangers of eating disorders. She tried many times to defeat anorexia but she failed.
We should think about banning size zero models in the fashion industry to protect healthy girls and women.


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