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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

김은란
Hi. I'm Eun-Ran Kim.
My job is Dental hygienist in University hospital.
I want to speak english very well and make good friends like you.

Can you help me? ;)
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Mytch
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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi. I'm Eun-Ran Kim.
My job is I am a dental hygienist in a university hospital.
I want to speak English very well and make good friends like you.

Can you help me? ;)

"My job is dental hygienist" is a bit of an awkward way to word it.  When we talk about what our job is, we usually refer to literal task related in our job rather than use a job title.  It's a little unnatural to use "My job is..." with a job title.  It's more natural to word it as "I am a/an..." or "I work as a/an..."

When you don't refer to a specific university by it's name, it isn't capitalised and you would need an article to accompany it (a).

Pink is for case change.

Your English looks good~  You should write more in your notebook entries!
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Ali-Italia

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi. My name is Eun-Ran Kim.
I'm working as Dental Hygienist at University hospital.
I would like to speak english fluently and make good friends like you.

Can you help me? ;)

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