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Hi, would you don’t mind to correct mu mistakes (grammar: come, indefinite article etc…), so I can learn better English.

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I remembered the days, when my father dropped me off to the school, and picked me up. The temperature used to be 42 degree Celsius. He rod me on his bicycle, and put a small piece of a cold wet cloth on his head to escape from the sun, when he dropped me off to the school. He (my father) struggled all of his life to support my education. He was a factory worker, and earing £30 a month. As a result of his struggle, I completed my graduation from one of the UK’s best universities. He is now 64, weak and retired. He has never asked me to come back and, helped him. I am struggling to find a job, which can help me to lead a better future. I am feeling guilty, that I could not do what he has done for me. Whereas, he spent all of his life struggled for me. I don’t know what to do in this situation. Can someone help me, what should I do? How can I look after him, when I am looking for a job away from my home country? The economic situations are worst in my home country.
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Zoy

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    I retyped your whole question with the mistakes corrected.

    Hi, would you mind to correct my mistakes (grammar: come, indefinite articles, etc.) so I can learn better English?

    Looking after Parents
    I remember the days, when my father would drop me off at school and pick me up. The temperature used to be 42 degrees Celsius. He rode me on his bicycle, and put a small piece of a cold wet cloth on his head to escape from the sun. He struggled all of his life to support my education. He was a factory worker, and earning £30 a month. As a result of his struggle, I completed my graduation from one of UK’s best universities. He is now 64, weak and retired. He has never asked me to come back and help him. I am struggling to find a job to help me to a better future. I feel guilty that I could not do what he has done for me, whereas, he spent all of his life struggling for me. I don’t know what to do in this situation. Can someone help me? What should I do? How can I look after him when I am looking for a job away from my home country? The economic situations are the worst in my home country.
    Thank you,
    Zoy

    Hello Zoy:

    Let's give this a look, shall we?

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    Hi, would you don’t mind to correct mu mistakes (grammar: come, indefinite article etc…), so I can learn better English.

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    Looking after Parents
    I remembered the days, when my father dropped me off to the school, and picked me up. The temperature used to be 42 degrees Celsius. He rode me on his bicycle, and put a small piece of a cold wet cloth on his head to escape [or "shield"] from the sun, when he dropped me off to the school. He (my father) [It is already indicated that it is your Father, so you do not need the parentheses to indicate "my father" remove the Parentheses and the words, "my father"]

    He struggled all of his life to support my education. He was a factory worker, and earned £30 a month. As a result of his struggle, I completed my graduation from one of the UK’s best universities. He is now 64, weak and retired. He has never asked me to come back and help him. I am struggling to find a job, which can help me to lead a better future. I am feeling guilty, that I could not do what he has done for me. Whereas, he spent all of his life struggling for me.
    [and you could also say, "working tirelessly for me".]

    I don’t know what to do in this situation. Can someone help me, what should I do?
    How can I look after him, when I am looking for a job away from my home country?
    The economic situations are worst in my home country.
    Thank you,
    Zoy





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    This is a very touching biographical account. I think you wrote it very well.
    There are strong visual descriptions of the efforts, and your telling is very passionate.
    Thanks.---Warm Regards, Bruce

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