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Nowadays, an ever-increasing number of children prefer sedentary activities instead of going out with their friends. Obsessively playing computer games causes children grave health problems. However, there are also good arguments in support of the view that playing computer games has immense benefits for children. This essay will discuss both sides of this important issue. I firmly believe that parents should monitor their children in order not to play such games excessively.


I am wondering whether it is a good introduction for a balanced opinion.

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    Hello Sarah. How are you?

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    Nowadays, an ever-increasing number of children prefer sedentary activities instead of going out with their friends. Obsessively playing computer games causes children grave health problems. However, there are also good arguments in support of the view that playing computer games has immense benefits for children. This essay will discuss both sides of this important issue. I firmly believe that parents should monitor their children in order [that they do not]play such games excessively.


    I am wondering whether it is a good introduction for a balanced opinion

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    Excellent. Only the last line required correction, and that was small.

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