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Do these sentences sound ok?

1. He, who firmly believed to understand everyone, was surprisingly blind when it came to her.

2. "Wasn't she enjoying that? She must have!" He said a little bit rudely, like he was defending a point and not, in fact, merely asking a question.

3. "Sure, it's all just a bloody picnic for me!" he exploded, yelling not really at the girl but more out of need to yell, to shout, to break things.

4. Tell him he should look around himself and see how much people care about him.

For learning: English
Base language: English
Category: Language

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    Really quickly, just off the bat I noticed two things.

    3. "but more out of A need to yell, to shout, and to break things."

    or if you want to keep your original stylized flow:

    "but more out A need to yell, to shout....to break things."

    or A need to yell, a need to shout....a need to break things."

    4. Tell him he should take a look around and see how much people care about him.

    This sounds like you are writing a book, right? So it will be a little stylized (such as leaving out the (AND) in the listing of needs, to make it seem more like someone speaking off the top of their head. Seems good so far.

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