Hello all. I wrote a brief review of the murmur of bees. Could you take a look at it? Thank you for your time. A short but beautiful novel, the murmur of bees is set in Linares, México during the Ci

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Hello all. I wrote a brief review of the murmur of bees. Could you take a look at it? Thank you for your time. A short but beautiful novel, the murmur of bees is set in Linares, México during the Civil War of the 1910 and other events such us spanish flu. It tells the story of Simonopio who was found alone under a bridge by family Morales, whose members are rich people, when he was only a baby. Simonopio grew up and became a compasionate and caring child who is an important member of the family now. Also, Simonopio has cleft palate, and this malformation don't allow him to comunicate well. Consequently, he is a victim of the terrible, if not at times evil, ignorance of the period. Throughout the novel, Simonopio realize that he has special, supernatural skills. For example, he can see or feel the future, but these skills constantly torture him. The story is moving, or even poignant, with thought-provoking events.

Feb 13, 2021 7:07 PM

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Hello all. I wrote a brief review of the murmur of bees. Could you take a look at it? Thank you for your time. A short but beautiful novel, the Murmur of bees is set in Linares, Mexico during the Civil War of 1910 and subsequent events such as the Spanish flu. It tells the story of Simonopio, who was found alone under a bridge by the wealthy Morales family, when he was only a baby. Simonopio grew up and became a compassionate and caring child who becomes an important member of the family. Simonopio unfortunately had a cleft palate, which didn’t allow him to communicate well. Consequently, he was a victim of the terrible, if not at times evil, ignorance of the period. Throughout the novel, Simonopio realises that he has supernatural skills. For example, he can see or feel the future, but these skills constantly torture him. The whole story is moving, at times poignant, with many thought-provoking events.

There are two tenses in the last two paragraphs. Either will work, but you should be consistent. If you use the past, he was found, he had a cleft palate, then you should keep it within the same para. Then it switches to he realises, works well with the fact that the skills constantly torture him. It makes it more immediate.

February 13, 2021

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