Hi 婷婷, this is a very nice story — good job! I would suggest that you bring out the L sound in "world." In addition, you did not pronounce "perseverance" correctly. Perhaps some kind person can model the pronunciation of "world" and "perseverance" for you. I cannot because I am on my computer and you can only record from a phone or tablet.

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