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please help me to examine the grammar and collocation in this paragraph As for some things I need to be done for building the travel agency, there are several aspects I need to do. Firstly, I will make a checklist which may involve how much money I should have to start the travel agency and how many people I should employ to promote the business. And secondly, I also need to achieve some kinds of qualifications, like business certification and health certification. There may be illegal to receive visiting reservation without any permission from the government.
Feb 13, 2017 1:29 PM
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"As for the things I need to do for the building of the travel agency, there are several aspects. Firstly, I will make a checklist which may involve how much money I should have to start the travel agency, and how many people I should employ to promote the business. Secondly, I also need to apply and get certain qualifications, like the business certification and health certification. It may be illegal to start the business without any permission from the government." Your short essay here is relatively good, just a few corrections. I recommend you to put it up in the Notes section of the italki website so you can get more people to check it. I put my Japanese essays on there for people to read and to correct as well, so highly recommended.
February 13, 2017
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