Hi. It is my IELTS Writing task 1 essay: " The bar chart illustrates the proportions of different housing types preferred by UK people ,based on a questionnaire, in three cities in 2009.
Overall, terraced houses were the least favorite choices among citizens in all three cities. Additionally, Liverpool citizens favored apartments most , while the majority of residents in London and Manchester preferred semi-detached houses.
Turning to details, regarding Liverpool, apartments were the most popular option among nearly 60% of respondents , which was nearly three times higher than that of semi-detached houses, at roughly 20%. Meanwhile, approximately 15 % of Liverpool participants chose detached houses , followed by terraced houses, at about 10%.
Looking at London, slightly under 40% of participants preferred semi-detached houses ,which was relatively higher than that of apartments ,at around 30%. The next highest figure belonged to detached houses ,accounting for nearly 25%. The lowest proportion went on terraced houses, comprising marginally less than 20%
Finally, in terms of Manchester, nearly 38% of respondents chose semi-detached houses as their favorite accommodation type, followed by detached houses and apartments , at approximately 36% and roughly 19%, respectively. The least preferred accommodation type was detached houses, making up about slightly over 10%."
Is it ok to write that ? And is it grammatically correct to write :"The least preferred accommodation type was detached houses, making up about slightly over 10%"
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