Kazu かず ڧڐږڕ
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Please correct me this writing for the topic🙏 Topic: Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy? Some people believe that having a lot of money is the main way to stay happy in their life and this way of thinking may be correct in a certain situation. For instance, having a lot of money and spending it without thinking about keeping some money to pay monthly fixed bills such as utilities and rent have positive effects on people’s mind. They can purchase whatever they want and eat and drink as much as they wish. They can also go traveling around the globe and stay at luxury hotels with a beautiful view from a bedroom. These experiences ensure ultimate happiness and this kind of memories will stay in their mind for good. On the other hand, are they really happy? Another factor that brings happinesses to people’s life is the people around them. Family and your close friends are priceless and you cannot buy them even if you are a billionaire. Some people will be friends with you if you have a lot of money. However, this kind of relationships doesn’t last long and it is unlikely to be genuine. Having lifetime friends and family is grueling wonderful and they will support you without hesitation no matter what. Finding true friends is by far more difficult and more precious than being successful in business or having a lot of money. I’m conclusion, I would say having a lot of money is the main way to be happy in a limited situation and having genuine friends and family can make people happy as well.
19 sept. 2023 21:54
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Please correct this writing for the topic🙏 Topic: Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy? Some people believe that having a lot of money is the main way to stay happy and this way of thinking may be correct in a certain situation. For instance, having a lot of money and spending it without thinking about keeping some money to pay monthly bills such as utilities and rent have positive effects on people’s minds. They can purchase whatever they want and eat and drink as much as they wish. They can also go traveling around the globe and stay at luxury hotels with a beautiful view from a bedroom. These experiences ensure ultimate happiness and these kind of memories will stay in their minds for good. On the other hand, are they really happy? Another factor that brings happiness to people’s lives are the people around them. Family and your close friends are priceless and you cannot buy them even if you are a billionaire. Some people will be friends with you if you have a lot of money. However, these kind of relationships don't last long and are unlikely to be genuine. Having lifetime friends and family is wonderful and they will support you without hesitation no matter what. Finding true friends is by far more difficult and more precious than being successful in business or having a lot of money. In conclusion, I would say having a lot of money is the main way to be happy in a limited situation and having genuine friends and family can make people happy as well.
20 septembre 2023
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