wendy
When we look around the world, different cultures have differnt ways to help children grow up. For example, in nomadic culture, children learn to ride horses at an early age. Meanwhile children have memorized many words in China at the same age. No matter where we live, the parents try their best to teach their children to gain more skill to get a better life. But only some of the children can be successed when they grow up. Because as the children grow up, many parents quit their chidren's life, but others continue to control their children's life. They ingore their children's interests. They just ask their children to listen to them. They plan their children's careers without considering their children's thoughts. As a consequence, both the chidren and their parents have to suffer from a bad relationship in their left lives. So, I think that the best gift parents can give to their children is boundary and room which can help them grow up freely. We are always proud of the role of being a human being in the nature. But when we observe the animals, they usually have the best way to teach their children. Eagles kick their chidren out of the nest built on the cliff. It sounds very scared,but when the baby eagles finally fly into the sky after dropping down for a few meters. They thanks for their parents.
8 janv. 2024 08:34
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When we look around the world, different cultures have different ways of helping children grow up. For example, in nomadic cultures, children learn to ride horses at an early age, while in China, children of the same age may have memorized many words. No matter where we live, parents try their best to teach their children to gain more skills for a better life. However, only some children succeed when they grow up because, as they grow older, many parents withdraw from their children's lives, while others continue to control them. They ignore their children's interests and insist their children obey them. They plan their children's careers without considering their thoughts. Consequently, both the children and their parents suffer from a strained relationship for the rest of their lives. Therefore, I think the best gift parents can give their children is the boundary and room to grow up freely. We are always proud of our role as humans in nature. But when we observe animals, they often have the best way to teach their children. Eagles push their young out of the nest built on a cliff. It sounds very scary, but when the baby eagles finally fly into the sky after dropping down for a few meters, they are thankful to their parents.
Your writing vividly captures the different upbringing methods across cultures and emphasizes the importance of parental roles. You've highlighted key differences, such as nomadic cultures and Chinese educational methods, very effectively. To improve, focus on verb forms and maintain subject-verb agreement throughout your essay. Your insight into the natural world's parenting, like the eagles, is compelling and adds a unique perspective to your writing. Keep exploring these diverse examples and refining your grammar for an even stronger impact. Keep up the great work!
8 janvier 2024
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