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Yesterday, I had a barbecue with people from my part-time job. I was a little late, but everyone was there, and we had a great time. The meat that someone bought was very delicious, and the yakisoba was also really good. After that, we decided to play with fireworks. At first, we thought about going to a park, but we thought the fireworks might be too loud. So, we decided to go to Enoshima by playing rock-paper-scissors. Only a few people had not been drinking alcohol, and only a few people had a driver’s license. So, we somehow asked one person to drive a rental car to Enoshima. I was very happy because it was my first time properly going into the sea at Enoshima. The fireworks were also very fun. At the end, we did sumo wrestling on the sand. I felt like I had become a child again. It was very nostalgic, and I had a lot of fun for the first time in a long time. At the end, I almost fell into the sea, but the boys were kind and put me down before I fell in. After that, one person drove almost the whole time and took everyone home. We had fun until the very end. I made a really great summer memory. I want to make more memories with everyone again!
21 juil. 2026 14:24
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Yesterday, I had a barbecue with the people from my part-time job. I arrived a little late, but everyone was already there, and we had a great time. The meat that someone bought was delicious, and the yakisoba was also really good. After that, we decided to set off some fireworks. At first, we thought about going to a park, but we were worried that the fireworks might be too loud. So, we decided where to go by playing rock-paper-scissors and ended up going to Enoshima. Only a few people hadn’t been drinking alcohol, and only a few people had a driving licence. So, we somehow convinced one person to drive a rental car to Enoshima. I was very happy because it was my first time properly going into the sea at Enoshima. Setting off the fireworks was also a lot of fun. At the end, we did sumo wrestling on the sand. I felt like I had become a child again. It was very nostalgic, and I had more fun than I had in a long time. At one point, I almost fell into the sea, but the boys were kind and caught me before I fell in. After that, one person drove almost the whole way and took everyone home. We had fun until the very end. I made a really wonderful summer memory. I hope I can make many more memories with everyone again!
Level: C1. This is one of your strongest pieces of writing. The story is engaging, well organised, and full of personality. You describe events naturally, include plenty of detail, and successfully express your emotions throughout. Most of the corrections were simply to make certain expressions sound more idiomatic in British English. Excellent work, keep it up! 😊
21 juil. 2026 17:29
Wow! You had a busy, yet awesome day. What's "yakisoba?"
21 juil. 2026 17:01
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