I've been writing some poems and would like an opinion on them. I have a feeling some of the rhymes aren't right and the words don't make sense. Please help. You can also tell me your favorite poem.
The Forgotten
I'm forgotten on your shelf
Collecting dust your perfect doll.
I'm not myself
in your presence. I won't fall.
My painted smile
Won't ever slip
Until you've left the aisle.
I'm wishing for a ship-
Forgotten passengers only-
To take us lands away.
You won't notice our absence for only
FOREVER...if you'de ever say
I love you!
Why is your back facing me?
This knowledge is not new,
But you'll never see
Because you've forgotten us.
We're never in your mind
Except with boastfull fuss.
We're crossing tonight the line.
Goodby...from your forgotton.

