I visited the dentist today!
Yesterday I had a toothache! I couldn't eat! I couldn't sleep! I couldn't speak! It was really hurt and I felt like I was almost dead. So this morning I went to visit the dentist. After the dentist explored my painful mouth he figured out that there were some caves in my teeth. And then he proceeded to fill up those caves. Now I can smile I can eat I can talk. I feel im alive.
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I visited the dentist today!
Yesterday I had a toothache! I couldn't eat! I couldn't sleep! I couldn't speak! It was really hurt and I felt like I was almost dead. So this morning I went to visit the dentist. After the dentist examined my painful mouth he figured out that there were some holes/cavities in my teeth. And then he proceeded to fill up those holes/cavities. Now I can smile, I can eat, I can talk. I feel alive again.
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Thank you very much for all your help. Yes I feel better now.
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I visited the dentist today!
Yesterday I had a toothache! I couldn't eat! I couldn't sleep! I couldn't speak! It was really hurt and I felt like I was almost dead. So this morning I went to visit the dentist. After the dentist explored my painful mouth he figured out that there were some cavities in my teeth. And then he proceeded to fill those cavities. Now I can smile, I can eat, and I can talk. I feel I'm alive.
I'm glad you feel better today.
NB cave = hang, cavity =sâu răng
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Just a couple of changes from the other correction:
I visited the dentist today!
Yesterday I had a toothache! I couldn't eat! I couldn't sleep! I couldn't speak! It was really hurt and I felt like I was almost dead. So this morning I went to visit the dentist. After the dentist examined my painful mouth,1 he figured out that there were some holes/cavities in my teeth. And then he He then2 proceeded to fill up3 those holes/cavities. Now I can smile, I can eat, I can talk. I feel alive again.
1 You need a comma after your being a sentence with a prepositional phrase
2 You should not start a sentence with "And" And is join to join two thoughts into a compound sentence so it is not proper to start a new sentence with it.
3 This may vary based on location, but in the US, we just use the word fill when referring to cavities - in fact, the noun for a cavity that has been fixed is 'filling'. Also, it is very common to use the phrase 'fill in' rather than 'fill up' when referring to holes.
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