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Sherlock
The is a small exercise required in a class on Coursera. The resulting text is asked to
use active verbs, adjectives and adverbs and be at least eight sentences. I decided describe the final
scene in the first series of Sherlock.
In the small room in which was in complete disorder, Sherlock, holding a poisoned pill,
keenly gazes at the wanted cruel taxi driver, who has killed several
persons. The driver explains how he easily forced them to eat swallow (or you could use take) such a pill, he is teasing goading Sherlock to do the same.
His method almost works now, that is a game, because there are two pilles, one has poison, the second has does not, and
each one of them must take one. (this sentance is a little awkward- Maybe "His method is that it is a game, almost works because there are two pills.....)
While Sherlock, weakened by drugs, has doubts about which one to chose,
the police, scattered on the dark street outside the house, wait,
ensured that this whole scene was planned and everything belongs to is a part of Sherlock's plan. At the same time,
Dr. Watson quietly lies on the roof of the building on the opposite side of Baker street. He is
going to shoot the driver in order to prevent Sherlock to have taken from taking the wrong pill. When the detective brings
his palm to his mouth, he coolly kills the criminal. Then he quickly runs and
providently throws his gun into Tamisa.
Hi! I'm a Sherlock fan as well! Your description was very good. Hope my comments helped.
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