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Ahmed Amir
Politics Politics is a big issue in people's lives these days. Certainly, it becomes more and more important topic to argue about it, because everyone is affected by the political decisions. In many countries, there are political parties which seem to be the controllers there. They persuade citizens to become members of their own political parties and try to make normal people taking part of the political life. In other countries, political parties don't work as they should work. Actually, they work for their own usefulness and don't care about people at all. In short words, their only goal is to take part of the governments to have power in controlling and making the events which affect people's faith and beliefs.
10 juin 2016 11:45
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Politics

Politics is a big issue in people's lives these days. Certainly, it becomes more and more important topic to argue about it, because everyone is affected by the political decisions. In many countries, there are political parties which seem to be the controllers there. They persuade citizens to become members of their own political parties and try to make normal people taking part of the political life. In other countries, political parties don't work as they should work. Actually, they work for their own usefulness and don't care about people at all. In short words, their only goal is to take part of the governments to have power in controlling and making the events which affect people's faith and beliefs.

Your writing is understandable but use the below instead and see how some words are slightly different. 

Politics is considered a big issue in people's lives today. Certainly as a topic, it is becoming more and more popular to discus and upon which to argue because everyone is affected by political decisions. In many countries, there is a political party which seems to be the controller. Parties persuade citizens to join them as members or to join other parties to encourage the every day person to become politically minded [you could also say " ....the join other parties to encourage the every day person to join the political discussion".]. In some countries, the parties do not work as they should; they work for personal benefit of the party leader and disregard the thoughts of other people. In short, their only goal is to gain power through being in government to have control and encourage events which might affect people's faiths and beliefs.


 

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