Inflammatory Letters
In January 1983 a co-worker left East Germany in an unheated train with one suitcase and two toddlers. She left her family and friends to join her husband who had been incarcerated for two years (sentenced to five years) for writing inflammatory letters to Aunt Gertrud in Giessen (West-Germany). He complained to her of not being able to go abroad and not being allowed to work in the profession he wanted.
The authorities went after him because he wasn't a part of the worker nobility, but foremost because East-Germany was in desperate need of hard currency (D-Mark). East-Germany was selling political prisoners to West-Germany each for about 100.000 DM. This business model came with very low production costs attached. East-Germany also sold would be emigrants for the same price per head.
My co-worker and her children turned from normal citizen to would be emigrants in the aftermath of the incident with the rebellious letters to aunt Gertrud. She was facing losing her job, get harassed all times, especially at a new bad job and had no hope of a decent education for her children. To sum it up: better leave the GDR if you want another happy day in your life and the life of your children. She left the GDR with her Children to join her husband in West-Germany and expected not to see her family again until they get 65 and could visit her.
Her husband is now a machine tools salesman and travels through Europe. And if it were not for the money, he would just go around the world.
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Inflammatory Letters
In January 1983, a co-worker left East Germany in an unheated train with one suitcase and two toddlers. She left her family and friends to join her husband who had been incarcerated for two years (sentenced to five years) for writing inflammatory letters to Aunt Gertrud in Giessen (West-Germany). He complained to her of not being able to go abroad, and not being allowed to work in the profession he wanted.The authorities went after him (use "not only" + "but" to prepare the reader's awareness that you are introducing comparative reasons) not only because he wasn't a part of the worker nobility, but foremost because East-Germany was in desperate need of hard currency (D-Mark). East-Germany was selling political prisoners to West-Germany each for about 100.000 DM (Is your readership familiar with the conversion of this currency? If not, indicate a value - dollars, I assume - that the reader will understand). This business model came with very low production costs attached. East-Germany also sold would be emigrants for the same price per head.
My co-worker and her children turned from normal citizen (They are all just one citizen?) to would-be (hyphenate!) emigrants in the aftermath of the incident with the rebellious letters to aunt Gertrud. She was facing losing her job, (other corrections have mentioned parallelism already) get harassed all times, especially at a new bad job and had no hope of a decent education for her children. To sum it up: better leave the GDR if you want another happy day in your life and the life of your children. She left the GDR with her Children to join her husband in West-Germany, (new clause here, so add a comma) and expected not to see her family again until they get 65 and could visit her.
Her husband is now a machine tools salesman and travels through Europe. And if it were not for the money, he would just go around the world.
Hi Ulricke.
Wow. Your English is great. It looks like you could use some help with when to use punctuation to split up those long sentences into digestible segments (It's hard to scale down from the complexity of German). I recommend this book for a good overview of clauses and how to separate them: https://goo.gl/L9KoXY Hope that helps!
:) Misty
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My co-worker and her children turned from normal citizens to would be emigrants in the aftermath of the incident with the rebellious letters to Aunt Gertrud. She was facing losing her job, being harassed all the times, especially at a new bad job and had no hope of a decent education for her children. To sum it up: better leave the GDR if you want another happy day in your life and the life of your children. She left the GDR with her Children to join her husband in West-Germany and expected not to see her family again until they get 65 and could visit her.
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My co-worker and her children turned from normal citizen to would be emigrants in the aftermath of the incident with the rebellious letters to aunt Gertrud. She was facing losing her job, get harassed all times, getting harassed constantly, especially at a her new bad job, which she was unhappy with, and had no hope of a decent education for her children. To sum it up: better leave the GDR if you want another happy day in your life and the life of your children. She left the GDR with her Cchildren to join her husband in West-Germany and expected not to see her family again until they get 65 and could visit her.
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