Could someone please correct my essay for TOEFL?
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
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This is an undeniable fact that there are a lot of things that older people can teach young people since they are more experienced and knowledgeable in many ways. However if we look at different aspects, there are also things for sure that young people can give advice to the elderly. I have two main reasons to support this idea.
First, younger people are more skilled to collect information which may be helpful in emergency situations. Nowadays, thanks to the Internet and computers, it has become much easier for us to get an access to huge amount of information. Especially social media is very useful when we get in trouble including earthquakes, fires, and so on. However most of older people are not used to using them and may fail to get the latest information. In fact, when there was a severe earthquake in Japan, the only way for the affected people to get information and connect with others was Twitter. Because of this, older people were more likely to fail to escape. From this accident, I strongly believe that young people should teach how to use recent technology to elderly people.
Second, young people can teach the new subjects they are learning in their school, which will lead to drastic changes in the future work. It is only recently that even the students in the elementally schools are required to study English as the second language, how AI works, and programming. This means the required skills in the future work will change. It will also have significant impacts on our future lifestyles, that matters all of us including older people. Since the elderly don’t have access to those classes at school, they should be taught by the younger people. It will definitely help them have better life in their near future.
For these reasons, I believe there are things younger people can teach older people.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
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It is an undeniable fact that there are a lot of things that older people can teach young people since they are more experienced and knowledgeable in many ways. However if we look at the different aspects, we find there are also things that young people can give advice about to the elderly. I have two main reasons to support this idea.
First, younger people are more skilled in collecting information, which may be helpful in emergency situations. Nowadays, thanks to the Internet and computers, it has become much easier for us to get access to a huge amount of information. Social media is especially useful when we get in trouble, including earthquakes, fires, and so on. However most older people are not used to using the internet and may fail to get the latest information. In fact, when there was a severe earthquake in Japan, the only way for the affected people to get information, and connect with others, was Twitter. Because of this, older people were more likely to fail to escape. From this incident, I strongly believe that young people should teach these skills associated with recent technology to the elderly.
Second, young people can teach the new subjects they are learning in their school, which will lead to drastic changes in future work. It is only recently that students in elementary schools are required to study English as a second language, how AI works, and programming. This means the required skills in future work will change. It will also have significant impacts on our future lifestyles, that matters to all of us including older people. Since the elderly don’t have access to those classes at school, they should be taught by the younger people. It will definitely help them have better life in their near future.
For these reasons, I believe there are things younger people can teach older people.
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It is an undeniable fact that there are a lot of things that older people can teach young people since they are more experienced and knowledgeable in many ways. However if we look at the different aspects, we find there are also things that young people can give advice about to the elderly. I have two main reasons to support this idea.
First, younger people are more skilled in collecting information, which may be helpful in emergency situations. Nowadays, thanks to the Internet and computers, it has become much easier for us to get access to a huge amount of information. Social media is especially useful when we get in trouble, including earthquakes, fires, and so on. However most older people are not used to using the internet and may fail to get the latest information. In fact, when there was a severe earthquake in Japan, the only way for the affected people to get information, and connect with others, was Twitter. Because of this, older people were more likely to fail to escape. From this incident, I strongly believe that young people should teach these skills associated with recent technology to the elderly.
Second, young people can teach the new subjects they are learning in their school, which will lead to drastic changes in future work. It is only recently that students in elementary schools are required to study English as a second language, how AI works, and programming. This means the required skills in future work will change. It will also have significant impacts on our future lifestyles, that matters to all of us including older people. Since the elderly don’t have access to those classes at school, they should be taught by the younger people. It will definitely help them have better life in their near future.
For these reasons, I believe there are things younger people can teach older people.
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Could someone please correct my essay for TOEFL?
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is nothing that young people can teach older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.----------------------------------------
This is an undeniable fact that there are a lot of things that older people can teach young people since they are more experienced and knowledgeable in many ways. However, if we look at different aspects, there are also things for sure that young people can give advice to the elderly. I have two main reasons to support this idea.
First, younger people are more skilled to collect information, which may be helpful in emergency situations. Nowadays, thanks to the Internet and computers, it has become much easier for us to get an access to a huge amount of information. Especially social media is very useful when we get in trouble including earthquakes, fires, and so on. However, most of older people are not used to using them and may fail to get the latest information. In fact, when there was a severe earthquake in Japan, the only way for the affected people to get information and connect with others was Twitter. Because of this, older people were more likely to fail to escape. From this accident, I strongly believe that young people should teach how to use recent technology to elderly people.
Second, young people can teach the new subjects they are learning in their school, which will lead to drastic changes in the future work. It is only recently that even the students in the elementally schools are required to study English as the second language, how AI works, and programming. This means the required skills in the future work will change. It will also have significant impacts on our future lifestyles, that matters all of us including older people. Since the elderly don’t have access to those classes at school, they should be taught by the younger people. It will definitely help them have a better life in the near future.
For these reasons, I believe there are things younger people can teach older people.
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