Shahbaz Khan
Are these sentences grammatically correct and natural enough? ▪ Wrapped in a warm blanket on a foggy morning; dewdrops on the glass-panes of your window; hot steamed pithas (cakes) ー aren't all these images associated with certain precious memories of Winter for us? But for some, winter means fear. For some helpless families who battle against poverty every day, the cold weather means living in fear of whether a patched-up old blanket or two pieces of cloth will even be enough to help them survive the onslaught of winter. Against the backdrop of the ongoing pandemic, the necessities of life are scarce and blankets are a luxury for the helpless. Death from the cold weather is often reported in the news. It is not an uncommon incidence. However, it is an entirely preventable one.The goal of Project Kombol's Winter Drive 2021-22 is to spread the warmth and deliver blankets to the cold-stricken of at least 10 districts. Your donation deserves to make a difference in the lives of people who have faced one cruel calamity after another. To ease the hardships of winter in those who have faced one calamity after another, we need your help. By donating some money you can save someone from the hardships of winter.
21 nov. 2021 12:47
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Are these sentences grammatically correct and natural enough? ▪ Sitting wrapped in a warm blanket on a foggy morning; dewdrops on your window; hot steamed pithas (cakes) ー most of us associate these images with precious memories of winter. But for some, winter means fear. For some helpless families who battle against poverty every day, the cold weather means living in fear of whether a patched-up old blanket or two pieces of cloth will be enough to help them survive the onslaught of winter. Against the backdrop of the ongoing pandemic, the necessities of life are scarce and blankets are a luxury for the helpless. Deaths arising from the cold weather often go unreported in the news. Yet whilst they are not uncommon, they are entirely preventable. The goal of Project Kombol's Winter Drive 2021-22 is to spread warmth and deliver blankets to cold-stricken communities in at least 10 districts. Your donations will make a difference to the lives of people who have faced one cruel calamity after another and will help to save them from the hardships of winter.
What an amazing piece! It will probably look like I've made a lot of changes but please don't be disheartened, your writing was at a really high standard. Honestly. As a native English speaker, I've edited it to take it to the next level for you. Just one question - you mentioned dew drops and I'm not sure that's quite right for winter? Condensation, frost or raindrops are alternatives you could choose from.
21 novembre 2021
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