Grammar check please!
Is this sentence grammatically wrong?
If so, please tell me the right one.

"Your everyday lives in this church, hearing this word, must let you wear these garments."

I live in this church. And the word here means the word of God. To wear these garments is a religious metaphor. It is said that we wear the clothes when we hear the word of God.

Question

Grammar check please!
Is this sentence grammatically wrong?
If so, please tell me the right one.

"Your everyday lives in this church, hearing this word, must let you wear these garments."

I live in this church. And the word here means the word of God. To wear these garments is a religious metaphor. It is said that we wear the clothes when we hear the word of God.

Answer

You should ask such questions in the entry section where you can see easily our colored corrections.

Your everyday LIFE IS in this church AND UPON hearing this word,  YOU must wear these garments."

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