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Here's my essay about the beautiful
landscape of Shapa Bay. Can anyone help
me to polish it or point some mistakes?
In Shapa Bay (Bay of Sand) the nocturnal canvas painted an altogether different masterpiece, one where the boundaries between sky and sea blurred into a seamless, impenetrable blackness. The night there was far from placid; Khanun, the super tropical cyclone, lent a tempestuous fervour to the bay. Thick, brooding clouds amassed, cloaking the stars and moon in obscurity so profound that even their feeble attempts at luminance were quashed.
Lightning streaked across the inky expanse, a desperate incision through the oppressive black veil, yet the darkness, ever voracious, swiftly swallowed each defiant flash. The firmament above and the Earth below dulled once more, save for the sparse, crimson starlight strewn along the coastline—clusters of terrestrial rubies scattered like a celestial Milky Way. It was only later that I discovered these were not falling stars but the flickering lights of pinwheels in a distant field of sea-bound windmills.
That night was a libertine, and the sea played accomplice to the relentless darkness, its thunderous roars echoing a wild exuberance. Wave upon wave surged toward the shore, a relentless tug at the torch-bearing figures on land, beckoning them into its embrace. Then, a marvel unfurled: stars seemed to rise from the very earth, first one, then two, then a constellation of them. Those on the shore had not succumbed to the obsidian abyss but had ignited Kongming Lanterns (Sky Lanterns), each one a beacon of hope.
The earth, now luminous, met the sky, and for a suspended moment, the roles reversed. It was as though the deities themselves, from their celestial perch, beheld a tapestry of earthly stars, each one a testament to human resolve. The gods, in that instance, cast their gaze upon the shimmering constellations below, and heaven and earth merged in a symphony of terrestrial wonder.
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Here's my essay about the beautiful landscape of Shapa Bay. Can anyone help me to polish it or point some mistakes?
In Shapa Bay (Bay of Sand) the nocturnal canvas painted an altogether different masterpiece, one where the boundaries between sky and sea blurred into a seamless, impenetrable blackness. The night there was far from placid; Khanun, the super tropical cyclone, lent a tempestuous fervour to the bay. Thick, brooding clouds amassed, cloaking the stars and moon in obscurity so profound that even their feeble attempts at luminance were quashed.
Lightning streaked across the inky expanse, a desperate incision through the oppressive black veil, yet the darkness, ever voracious, swiftly swallowed each defiant flash. The firmament above and the Earth below dulled once more, save for the sparse, crimson starlight strewn along the coastline—clusters of terrestrial rubies scattered like a celestial Milky Way. It was only later that I discovered these were not falling stars but the flickering lights of pinwheels in a distant field of sea-bound windmills.
That night was a libertine, and the sea played accomplice to the relentless darkness, its thunderous roars echoing a wild exuberance. Wave upon wave surged toward the shore, a relentless tug at the torch-bearing figures on land, beckoning them into its embrace. Then, a marvel unfurled: stars seemed to rise from the very earth, first one, then two, then a constellation of them. Those on the shore had not succumbed to the obsidian abyss but had ignited Kongming Lanterns (Sky Lanterns), each one a beacon of hope.
The earth, now luminous, met the sky, and for a suspended moment, the roles reversed. It was as though the deities themselves, from their celestial perch, beheld a tapestry of earthly stars, each one a testament to human resolve. The gods, in that instance, cast their gaze upon the shimmering constellations below, and heaven and earth merged in a symphony of terrestrial wonder.
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Can anyone explain what the sentences in 【】 mean, especially the first sentence? I can’t imagine the scenery. Why would the good smell of ginger, garlic and potato peel off the outside skin of one’s nose?
The smell of chillies burnt the tip of my nose. 【The whiff of ginger, garlic and potato peeled off the outside skin of my sneezing nose. The mouth-watering aroma of fresh dates tickled the inside hairs of my petite nose. It was like sitting in the food market of paradise. 】My eyes deceived me, as I took a look at the tulip-red dates, sitting in a box right in front of me. The scrumptious fruit looked so delicious. I picked it up from the sack. It felt as soft as silk; I put it into my mouth, and chewed slowly, it tasted heavenly. This was the greatest thing I had ever ingested. This was more luxurious than a million boxes of Cadburys ‘Milk Tray’. The juice of the fruit trickled down my moist tongue as slow as an ancient tortoise. I clapped my tired miniature eyes on a cup, which sat on an old oak Victorian table beside the box. I gulped the liquid inside it down in three sips. This drink was as white as milk and as sweet as honey.
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呢个系我同埋同学改咗嘅版本(系國語區嘅朋友仔叫改嘅),勞駕大家幫手再修改下,令語言更加優美,唔該賽!
西外嘅晚
系有啲寒冷
但我好中意噉嘅晚
都中意呢度嘅灯火通明
呢度嘅人声鼎沸
都等咗好耐
等等咗好耐
等咗好耐同你见面
佢哋係度笑闹
呢个世界
好似喧嚣又沉默
而我唯有一个人
去买啲嘢
填饱个胃
填满我个心
甜蜜嘅蛋糕
芬芳嘅氣味(覺得呢度冇處理好)
我一路行住
行到人群中
点解
唔去试下
唔去享受。
這人间嘅烟花气
我突然间钟意咗呢個人间
爱這香气四溢啲嘢食
爱這火炉上跳跃嘅烟气
爱這油脂嘅动人滋味
重有好多好多嘅大好嘅人或者物
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呢个系我同埋同学改咗嘅版本(系國語區嘅朋友仔叫改嘅),勞駕大家幫手再修改下,令語言更加優美,唔該賽!
西外嘅晚
系有啲寒冷
但我好中意噉嘅晚
都中意呢度嘅灯火通明
呢度嘅人声鼎沸
都等咗好耐
等咗好耐
等咗好耐同你见面
佢哋係度笑闹
呢个世界
好似喧嚣又沉默
而我唯有一个人
去买啲嘢
填饱个胃
填满我个心
甜蜜嘅蛋糕
芬芳嘅氣味(覺得呢度冇處理好)
我一路行住
行到人群中
点解
唔去试下
唔去享受。
這人间嘅烟花气
我突然间钟意咗呢個人间
爱這香气四溢啲嘢食
爱這火炉上跳跃嘅烟气
爱這油脂嘅动人滋味
重有好多好多嘅大好嘅人或者物
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點解港樂會“沒落”?比如話經濟地位相對下降、無接班人才、歷史政治等等,歡迎大家一同深入探討!
為什麼港樂會“沒落”?原因有,比如說,經濟地位相對下降,缺少接班人才、還有歷史或政治等等因素,期待大家一起深入探討!
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What's the difference between the two sentences?
1. I stood on the top of the mountain, admiring the grand view of the city.
2. Standing on the top of the mountain, I admired the grand view of the city.
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Martin Luther King says "the life of the Ne++++++++gr -----o is still sadly crippled by the manacles of segregation and the chains of discrimination." Why would these words be an effective method of moving his audience?
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How can cohesion be achieved through arrangement of old and new information in the sentence “This is our hope. This is the faith that I will go back to the South with. With this faith we will be able to hew out of the mountain of despair a stone of hope.”
What's the difference between coherence and cohesion?
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Why do English authors usually write“One day her mother, having made some cakes, said to her…” instead of“having “Having made some cakes, one day her mother said to her…”?
What about“Little Red Riding Hood, hearing the big voice of the wolf, was at first afraid”and“Hearing the big voice of the wolf, the Little Red Riding Hood was at first afraid”?
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