It is my IELTS Writing task 1 essay: "The line charts illustrate the percentages of households possessing three electrical appliances and the average time people spent on housework per week during the period between 1920 and 2019. Overall, electrical appliances were owned by a larger proportion of families throughout the period. Additionally, the figure for weekly hours spent on household chores experienced a downward trend towards the end of the period. Regarding the first line chart, in 1920, 40% and 30% of households owned washing machines and vacuum cleaners, respectively . Both of their figures saw a marked increase ,reaching 60% in 1960. Following that, the proportion of washing machine ownership fluctuated minimally over two years and then finished at approximately 75% at the end of the period ,while that of vacuum cleaner possession rose significantly to 100% and remained at this level until 2019. In contrast, refrigerators were least popular among households at the beginning of the period, with the figure standing at roughly 2%.Then, the figure for this electrical appliance grew dramatically to surpass other categories at 90% in 1960, and from 1980 onwards, every family in this nation had a refrigerator. Concerning the remaining line chart, the amount of time spent on housework started at 50 hours per week in 1920. Subsequently, the figure fell considerably to 20% 40 years later. Finally, housework just took up people nearly 10 hours in 2019." Is it Ok to write that ? Hope to receive your feedback.