Next month I will take part in an interview. This is my self-introduction. Please help me to check whether the expression is native. Thanks a lot!

Good morning, everyone. I’m glad to be here for this interview. Thanks for giving me this chance to present myself.
My name is Chen Xinyi. Currently, I’m a postgraduate student in Anhui University, majored in Teaching Chinese to Speakers of Other Languages.
In this major, my biggest gain is professional knowledge, which is the basis of our teaching. For example, in the Second Language Acquisition course, I have a deeper understanding of how foreign students learn Chinese, which helps me know how to help them overcome difficulties better when learning Chinese.
In addition, I started teaching Chinese as a part-time job online one year ago. My students are several children from Philippines about 10 years old. I teach them through picture books, videos, songs and creative activities. I’m proud to say that they enjoy my Chinese lessons very much and fall in love with Chinese.
As for my personality, people who are familiar with me say that I’m very adaptable and responsible, so I can quickly adapt to life in other countries if I go abroad. Meanwhile, I am good at cooking and traditional musical instruments, such as Chinese zither. I’m sure it can benefit me a lot to be a Chinese teacher.
Finally, I hope I can pass this interview and become an excellent Chinese teacher. I will hold on to my dreams and never give up. That’s all about me, and thank you again for your listening.

Question

Next month I will take part in an interview. This is my self-introduction. Please help me to check whether the expression is native. Thanks a lot!

Good morning, everyone. I’m glad to be here for this interview. Thanks for giving me this chance to present myself. 
My name is Chen Xinyi. Currently, I’m a postgraduate student in Anhui University, majored in Teaching Chinese to Speakers of Other Languages. 
In this major, my biggest gain is professional knowledge, which is the basis of our teaching. For example, in the Second Language Acquisition course, I have a deeper understanding of how foreign students learn Chinese, which helps me know how to help them overcome difficulties better when learning Chinese.
In addition, I started teaching Chinese as a part-time job online one year ago. My students are several children from Philippines about 10 years old. I teach them through picture books, videos, songs and creative activities. I’m proud to say that they enjoy my Chinese lessons very much and fall in love with Chinese.
As for my personality, people who are familiar with me say that I’m very adaptable and responsible, so I can quickly adapt to life in other countries if I go abroad. Meanwhile, I am good at cooking and traditional musical instruments, such as Chinese zither. I’m sure it can benefit me a lot to be a Chinese teacher.
Finally, I hope I can pass this interview and become an excellent Chinese teacher. I will hold on to my dreams and never give up. That’s all about me, and thank you again for your listening.

Answer

1. of about 10 years old.   
2. and have fallen in love with   
3. and playing traditional Chinese musical instruments   
4. it benefits me a lot as a Chinese teacher.   
5. thank you for listening.

Hope that helps! :)

Answer

Hi Serena,

I made a few corrections to your text. I would suggest that you meet with someone on Italki to discuss the content of your response. You need to frame your response according to the job description and explain why you would be a good fit for them, not only why this opportunity would benefit you. Good luck!

Good morning, everyone. I’m glad to be here for this interview. Thanks for giving me this chance to present myself. 
My name is Chen Xinyi. Currently, I’m a postgraduate student at Anhui University majoring in Teaching Chinese to Speakers of Other Languages. 
In this major, I gained   professional (Do you mean pedagogical? Normally the Chinese use "professional" when they mean "technical knowledge." I would suggest naming the knowledge so your interviewer understand the type of knowledge you've acquired.) knowledge, which is the basis of our teaching. For example, in the Second Language Acquisition course, I have a deeper understanding of how foreign students learn Chinese, which helps me know how to help them overcome difficulties better when learning Chinese.
In addition, I started teaching Chinese as a part-time job online one year ago. I teach  several children from the Philippines who are about 10 years old. I teach them through picture books, videos, songs and creative activities. I’m proud to say that they enjoy my Chinese lessons very much and fell  in love with Chinese.
As for my personality, people who are familiar with me say that I’m very adaptable and responsible, so I can quickly adapt to life in other countries if I go abroad. Meanwhile, I am good at cooking and playing traditional musical instruments, such as Chinese zither. I’m sure it can benefit me a lot to be a Chinese teacher.
Finally, I hope I can pass this interview and become an excellent Chinese teacher. I will hold on to my dreams and never give up. That’s all about me, and thank you again for your time..