Carmen Díaz Muñoz
It is important that people choose a career when they are still quite young. Do you agree? ESSAY Some people know what career they want to do when they are very young, other people know it later or never. You need to study so hard to access to a career. The question here it is: is it important to choose a career being still very young? Due to the actual situation of sanitary emmergency the way to teach is changing drastically. In fact, the telematics methods are increasingly in use and the students since primary school to university are studying from their houses. However, the matter is the same: people reach knowledge. Nowadays, the world economy is in crisis and the future generations of professionals will have to deal with it, they will can solve it or getting it worse. The education is very important in this concern because of it depending that the people have enough knowledge to deal with the situation. In my opinion there are teenagers who are concerned about their future and work hardly to achieve their goals through a good academic formation, but the most of them have not conciencious of the importance of the studies and loose their time in other matters more enjoyable. Maybe they will take the good way later. In conclusion, adult people maybe have more encourage to do a career or start their own business than quite young people who are more dispersed. However, if you choose your career early you have more time to develope it. To conclude, to choose a career being so young can be important but not crucial.
2020年12月1日 16:18
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It is important that people choose a career when they are still quite young. Do you agree? ESSAY Some people know what career they want to do when they are very young, other people know it later or never. You need to study hard to prepare for a career. The question here is: is it important to choose a career while still very young? Due to the current health emergency, the way to teach is changing drastically. In fact, the telematics methods are increasingly in use and students from primary school to university are studying from their houses. However, the goal is the same: people obtain knowledge. Nowadays, the world economy is in crisis and future generations of professionals will have to deal with it. They may solve it or it may get worse. The education is very important in this context because solving it requires that the people have enough knowledge to deal with the situation. In my opinion there are teenagers who are concerned about their future and work hard to achieve their goals through a good academic background, but the most of them are not aware of the importance of their studies and waste their time in other matters more enjoyable. Maybe they will do the right thing later. In conclusion, adult people maybe have more encourage to do a career or start their own business than quite young people who are more dispersed [not sure what this sentence means, or what you are trying to say]. However, if you choose your career early you have more time to develop it. To conclude, choosing a career so young can be important but not crucial. Perhaps: "encourage" is a verb... do you mean to say that "adults have more courage?". Or do you mean to say "adults should be encouraged to start their own businesses"? Also, "young people who are more dispersed"... "dispersed" usually means "physically distant". Did you mean to say that "young people are more distracted from the goal of choosing and preparing for their career"? Overall, good job on an ambitious essay.
2020年12月1日
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