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Rode the bikes a beautiful day

Yesterday my friends and I rode the bikes in the city near the reservoir.in the summer on The Forest trail rode the bikes
We are loudly to sing sing hehe:)
How long no so happy
I had a nice day!!

 

2015年6月2日 06:56
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@Phil thank you very much!

I will more keeping try hard

2015年6月5日

it should very tired after a long  bike trip 

2015年6月5日

it should very after a long  bike trip 

2015年6月5日

Good job, I actually liked the Chinese turns of phrase — your version seems really poetic. Here are some corrections, because I know you’re interested in sounding like a native English speaker:

 

Yesterday my friends and I rode bikes in the city near the reservoir. In the summer, we ride bikes on the forest trail.
(While we ride,) We sing out loud hehe:)
I hadn’t been that happy in so long! (or "I was happier than I'd been in a long time" -- there are many options to say this.)
I had a nice day!!

 

You should use the “notebook entry” feature instead of the “discussions” feature if you’d like corrections.

2015年6月5日

Please correct my mistakes in grammar part 

Thanks

2015年6月3日
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