Efe Can
one winter day ı woke up at seven half past today. I prepared breakfast. Than I went to universty by bus. But bus came too late. I didn't join first lesson. I m unhappy. later my teacher wrote full students on attendance list. than I went to refectory. I ate a lunch but I was alone. I went out and went to sport centre and I did sport by two hours.than I come at my home and I m writing it text.
2013年12月23日 14:30
訂正 · 4

Hi Efe, here is my correction as a native English (American) speaker:

 

One winter day

I woke up at seven half past 7:30 today this morning. I prepared After eating breakfast. Than I went to universty by bus then I took the bus to the university. But Unfortunately, the bus came too late, so . I didn't join I missed the first lesson. I m This made me unhappy. (<em>An exclamation point (!)would add emphasis here.</em>) Later, my teacher wrote full students on prepared his (<em>or her</em>) attendance list. than Then I went to the refectory (<em>In american english you might use cafeteria</em>). I ate a lunch but I was alone. I went out and went to the sport centre (<em>in American english you could use athletic center, health club or gym</em>) and I did sport by played sports for two hours.than Then I come at my went home and I m writing it text began writing about my day.

2014年10月31日
Sarah, thank you for this.how are you ?
2014年10月31日
Hey Efe Can! If you wanna get corrections from native speakers of English, you'd better choose English language when you are posting your writing in here. In this way, more native people will see your post in the forum, and will correct them more quickly. :)
2013年12月23日
Today; I woke u at seven half past and I prepared breakfast . I took the bus to the university. I missed my first class because the bus came too late. I was unhappy. Later; my teacher wrote a full list of the students on attendance. After that; I went to the refectory to have lunch. I ate alone. Finally; I went to the sport centre for two hours;then I came home and here i am writing this text. I am not a native english speaker but here are some corrections =)
2013年12月23日
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