Hi there, here are my corrections. I hope this is useful, let me know if you have any questions about them!
We moved into new place / house to live yesterday after finishing our stay at a hotel.Diary
We moved in new place to live yesterday after finishing our stay at a hotel.I'm happy to hear you are finally in your new home!
* "On my way. . ." - This means almost the same thing as "before getting there" but it emphasizes that you were already on your way to the shopping center (US spelling - sorry if it's confusing) and decided to drop by the beach.
** The difference between "speaking" and "talking" is very subtle. "Speaking" means the skill of being able to speak. "Talking" usually means having a conversation. Often, both words can be used interchangeably.
*** "She was" - She still is 83, but because you are telling the story in Past Tense, you should keep the verbs in Past Tense.
**** I think this is correct. Even though it contradicts what I just wrote in the above note, it sounds very natural to say "lives by herself"
***** "I'm sure that . . ." is okay. But I think saying "I feel that . . ." sounds more natural. The meaning is very similar to と思う or と感じています.
****** Also, like David said in his correction, the verb tenses need to "agree" with each other. But I think that the gerund form ("having dinner at home . . . going out") sounds better than the infinitive ("to have dinner at home . . . to go out"). A gerund is a noun-form of a verb. The "~ing" ending is similar to adding "~こと" to a Japanese verb.